写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议注意时态和句子结构的正确使用，同时避免重复和冗长。可以尝试用更简洁的句子表达自己的观点。

範例: No, I don't write a lot because I am not confident in my writing skills. When I was young, my Chinese was not very good, so I rarely practiced writing. This made me feel nervous and less motivated to write.

建議: 回答内容较好，但句子结构和用词需要改进，建议使用连词使句子更连贯，同时注意时态和冠词的使用。

範例: I like to write novels based on characters I create myself. I enjoy imagining their lifestyles and personalities, and I usually give them happy endings. Creating these stories makes me feel satisfied.

建議: 回答表达不清晰，语法错误较多，建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和词汇，表达观点时要条理清楚。

範例: Yes, I think my writing changes over time. When I reread my stories, I sometimes feel unsatisfied and decide to revise them to make them better.

建議: 回答中有语法和表达不准确的问题，建议使用更自然的表达方式，注意句子连贯和词汇的准确使用。

範例: I prefer typing because it is more convenient. My writing is saved immediately on my computer or phone. Also, my handwriting is poor, so typing is easier for me.

× As I was young my Chinese was not that good.

✓ When I was young, my Chinese was not that good.

这里应使用时间状语从句引导词when，而不是as，表示“当我年轻的时候”。

× So I hardly practice at writing because it will makes me feel nervous and unconfident and also my hand.

✓ So I hardly practice writing because it makes me feel nervous and unconfident, and also affects my hand.

practice后面直接接动名词writing，不用介词at；makes应为make的第三人称单数形式makes，但主语it对应单数，will makes错误，应去掉will；句子结构不完整，需补充“affects my hand”表达完整意思。

× I like to write novels that based on the characters that I create by myself.

✓ I like to write novels that are based on the characters that I create by myself.

这里需要被动语态，based前应加be动词are，表示“基于我自己创造的人物”。

× I can imagine their lifestyle, their personality and give them a life that with a happy ending.

✓ I can imagine their lifestyle, their personality and give them a life with a happy ending.

介词that with错误，应直接用with连接，表示“有一个幸福的结局”。

× I was satisfied to create them.

✓ I am satisfied to create them.

根据上下文，表达的是现在的感受，应使用现在时am satisfied。

× Yes, I think the things are right would change because when I look returned to the things that the stories I write and sometimes I will feel unsatisfied about the stories that I write before and I will change it and make it to be more satisfied and successful.

✓ Yes, I think the things I write would change because when I look back at the stories I wrote, sometimes I feel unsatisfied with them and I change them to make them more satisfying and successful.

句子结构混乱，look returned应为look back；unsatisfied后接介词with；make it to be错误，应为make them more satisfying；时态应统一，过去时和现在时混用需调整。

× Yes, I think the things are right would change because when I look returned to the things that the stories I write and sometimes I will feel unsatisfied about the stories that I write before and I will change it and make it to be more satisfied and successful.

✓ Yes, I think the things I write would change because when I look back at the stories I wrote, sometimes I feel unsatisfied with them and I change them to make them more satisfying and successful.

look returned to错误，应为look back at；unsatisfied后应接介词with。

× I prefer typing when I am writing because I think typing is convenient and the things I write can be immediately recorded in the computer or phones, and also I have poor handwriting and I think the paper I write would always be strong, so I prefer type.

✓ I prefer typing when I am writing because I think typing is convenient and the things I write can be immediately recorded on the computer or phone. Also, I have poor handwriting and I think the paper I write on would always be messy, so I prefer typing.

介词in the computer或phones应为on the computer or phone；最后一句prefer type应为prefer typing；strong用词不当，应为messy或其他形容词描述字迹不清晰。