写作— Part 1 評分報告
對話
Part 1
考官
Do you write a lot?
考生
No, I don't write a lot because if I have something important need to remember, I prefer typing keywords on my smartphones. It is more convenient and easier for me to get rid of the paper and pens just typing.
考官
What do you like to write? Why?
考生
I like to write about small events that happened in my daily life because although they seem insignificant, they often gives me a lot of courage and motivation. For example, reflecting on these more experiments often keep me to be a better person, as even small changes can have a big impact on your.
考官
Do you think the things you write would change?
考生
Yes, I think the things I write would change because I remember when I was small I have been writing a note about if I had CN¥100 every day I will absolutely be the most happy person in the world, but with the time past I find it had changed if I only had one.
考官
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
考生
I prefer typing when I am writing because I think typing can await much trouble. For example, we don't need extra material such as paper, pens and so on. And the other time typing can save us a lot of time and more quickly for us to write down the urgent things.
評估
總分
Part 1
Do you write a lot?
分數: 65.0建議: 你的回答表达了观点，但语法和表达不够自然，且句子结构较为混乱。建议简化句子结构，注意时态和冠词的使用，使表达更流畅自然。
範例: No, I don't write much because I prefer typing keywords on my smartphone when I need to remember something important. It's more convenient and helps me avoid using paper and pens.
What do you like to write? Why?
分數: 60.0建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，且句子较长且不连贯。建议使用简单句表达观点，并用恰当的连接词使句子更连贯。
範例: I like to write about small events in my daily life because they give me courage and motivation. For example, reflecting on these experiences helps me improve myself, as small changes can have a big impact.
Do you think the things you write would change?
分數: 55.0建議: 回答中时态混乱，表达不清晰，且句子结构复杂。建议使用正确的时态，简化句子，并明确表达观点。
範例: Yes, I think what I write changes over time. When I was young, I wrote that having 100 yuan every day would make me very happy, but now my thoughts have changed.
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
分數: 60.0建議: 回答中有词汇使用错误和表达不流畅的问题。建议使用准确的词汇，简洁表达观点，并用连接词使句子更连贯。
範例: I prefer typing because it saves time and doesn't require extra materials like paper or pens. Also, typing helps me quickly write down urgent information.
文法
× No, I don't write a lot because if I have something important need to remember, I prefer typing keywords on my smartphones.
✓ No, I don't write a lot because if I have something important to remember, I prefer typing keywords on my smartphone.
句中缺少不定式to，正确表达应为"something important to remember"，表示“需要记住的重要事情”。此外，smartphones应为单数形式smartphone，因为通常指个人使用的手机。
× No, I don't write a lot because if I have something important need to remember, I prefer typing keywords on my smartphones.
✓ No, I don't write a lot because if I have something important to remember, I prefer typing keywords on my smartphone.
smartphones是复数形式，但此处应指单一设备，故改为单数形式smartphone。
× It is more convenient and easier for me to get rid of the paper and pens just typing.
✓ It is more convenient and easier for me to get rid of paper and pens by just typing.
句中"the paper and pens"使用了定冠词，表达泛指时应去掉定冠词；另外，"just typing"前应加介词by，表示方式。
× although they seem insignificant, they often gives me a lot of courage and motivation.
✓ although they seem insignificant, they often give me a lot of courage and motivation.
主语they为复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式give，而非单数gives。
× For example, reflecting on these more experiments often keep me to be a better person, as even small changes can have a big impact on your.
✓ For example, reflecting on these experiments often helps me to be a better person, as even small changes can have a big impact on you.
"more experiments"表达不清，应去掉more；"keep me to be"用法错误，改为"helps me to be"更合适；"your"应为宾格"you"。
× Yes, I think the things I write would change because I remember when I was small I have been writing a note about if I had CN¥100 every day I will absolutely be the most happy person in the world, but with the time past I find it had changed if I only had one.
✓ Yes, I think the things I write would change because I remember when I was small I had been writing a note about if I had CN¥100 every day I would absolutely be the happiest person in the world, but as time passed I found it had changed if I only had one.
时态混乱，"have been writing"改为过去完成时"had been writing"；条件句中"will"改为过去式"would"；"most happy"应为最高级"happiest"；"with the time past"表达不自然，改为"as time passed"；"find"改为过去式"found"。
× Yes, I think the things I write would change because I remember when I was small I have been writing a note about if I had CN¥100 every day I will absolutely be the most happy person in the world, but with the time past I find it had changed if I only had one.
✓ Yes, I think the things I write would change because I remember when I was small I had been writing a note about if I had CN¥100 every day I would absolutely be the happiest person in the world, but as time passed I found it had changed if I only had one.
条件句中使用虚拟语气，情态动词应使用过去式would而非will。
× I prefer typing when I am writing because I think typing can await much trouble.
✓ I prefer typing when I am writing because I think typing can avoid much trouble.
动词"await"用法错误，应使用"avoid"表示“避免”。
× For example, we don't need extra material such as paper, pens and so on.
✓ For example, we don't need extra materials such as paper, pens and so on.
material应为复数形式materials，表示多种材料。
× And the other time typing can save us a lot of time and more quickly for us to write down the urgent things.
✓ Also, typing can save us a lot of time and help us write down urgent things more quickly.
句子结构混乱，"more quickly"位置不当，应放在句尾修饰动词"write"；"the other time"表达不清，改为"Also"更自然。
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