写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中有较多重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议减少重复，使用更准确的时态和表达方式，使回答更简洁流畅。

範例: Yes, I wrote many papers during my graduate studies, and I believe I am good at writing. In fact, I have won several scholarships based on my writing skills.

建議: 回答内容不清晰，语法和词汇使用错误较多，导致表达含糊。建议使用简单明了的句子，明确说明喜欢写什么和原因。

範例: I like to write about interesting events happening around me because it helps me understand the world better and share my thoughts with others.

建議: 回答不完整且表达不流畅，缺少具体细节。建议完整表达观点，并用连接词使句子连贯。

範例: Yes, the topics I write about may change over time, but the insights I gain from writing will remain valuable and memorable.

建議: 回答中存在词汇错误和语法问题，表达不清晰。建议使用正确词汇，简洁表达偏好及原因。

範例: I prefer handwriting because it makes me feel comfortable and allows me to express my thoughts more clearly and thoughtfully.

× Yes, I, I would write a lot of paper in my Graduate School and I, I think I'm good at it.

✓ Yes, I wrote a lot of papers in my Graduate School and I think I'm good at it.

这里的“paper”应使用复数形式“papers”，因为表示多篇论文。

× Yes, I, I would write a lot of paper in my Graduate School and I, I think I'm good at it.

✓ Yes, I wrote a lot of papers in my Graduate School and I think I'm good at it.

描述过去的经历时，动词应使用过去时态“wrote”，而不是“would write”。

× And you, I used to obtain a lot of scholarship with writing.

✓ And I used to obtain a lot of scholarships with writing.

“used to”表示过去的习惯，后面动词用原形“obtain”正确，但“scholarship”应为复数“scholarships”，因为获得多项奖学金。

× And you, I used to obtain a lot of scholarship with writing.

✓ And I used to obtain a lot of scholarships with writing.

“scholarship”应为复数形式“scholarships”，表示多项奖学金。

× I would like to ride the events occurred around around on the.

✓ I would like to write about the events that occurred around me.

“ride”应为“write”，且“occurred around around on the”结构混乱，应改为“occurred around me”表示发生在我周围的事件。

× I would like to ride the events occurred around around on the.

✓ I would like to write about the events that occurred around me.

句子结构混乱，缺少必要的介词和定语从句，需调整使句子通顺。

× I will discover any interesting events and I also can discover other S shortage.

✓ I will discover any interesting events and I can also discover other shortages.

“S shortage”不明确，应为“shortages”，且“can also”位置调整更自然。

× I will discover any interesting events and I also can discover other S shortage.

✓ I will discover any interesting events and I can also discover other shortages.

“shortage”应为复数“shortages”，表示多种不足。

× Yes, the things I write would change, definitely, but the discoveries I get from it would not change.

✓ Yes, the things I write will change, definitely, but the discoveries I get from it will not change.

表示将来时应使用“will”而非“would”，更符合语境。

× And uh, I will remember the.

✓ And uh, I will remember them.

句子缺少宾语，“the”后应接名词或代词，改为“them”指代前文内容。

× I prefer the country writing because handwriting let me feel comfortable and give me a lot of time since entirely and express myself more clearly.

✓ I prefer handwriting because it makes me feel comfortable, gives me plenty of time, and allows me to express myself more clearly.

“country writing”应为“handwriting”；“let me feel”改为“makes me feel”；“since entirely”不合适，改为“gives me plenty of time”；句子结构需调整使表达清晰。