写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to give a clear and complete sentence as your main answer, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid short, incomplete sentences and grammar mistakes. For example, say 'Yes, I write a lot because it helps me express my feelings and makes me feel good.'

範例: Yes, I write a lot because it helps me express my feelings and makes me feel good. Moreover, writing allows me to organize my thoughts clearly.

建議: Focus on giving a clear and direct answer first, then explain with specific details. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words like 'and' or 'also' to connect ideas logically.

範例: I like to write articles because I enjoy mixing information from different sources. Also, I try to add my own ideas to make the writing more interesting.

建議: Your answer is good but try to use clearer linking words and correct grammar. For example, use 'because' to explain reasons and avoid repeating words. Also, try to make sentences more concise.

範例: Yes, I believe what I write will change over time because I will gain more experience and knowledge, which will influence my thoughts and plans.

建議: Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid filler words like 'uh-huh' or 'I don't know'. Use linking words to connect your ideas and explain your feelings more precisely.

範例: I prefer handwriting because I am proud of my handwriting. It feels more personal and real, and it gives me a special feeling, like something delicate and beautiful.

× Habit.

✓ It's a habit.

The original sentence 'Habit.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb and subject, which makes it incomplete. Adding 'It's a habit.' forms a complete sentence with subject and verb, improving clarity.

× It's make me feel good and I can express my feeling through the writing.

✓ It makes me feel good and I can express my feelings through writing.

The verb 'make' should be in third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the subject 'It'. Also, 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match the context, and 'through the writing' is better as 'through writing' for natural expression.

× Sometime I like reading article then I like to copy it and another website I I don't have to be copied at same I say some some new information also like like mixing information.

✓ Sometimes I like reading articles, then I like to copy them, and from another website, I don't have to copy exactly; I also add some new information, like mixing information.

The word 'Sometime' should be plural 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Article' should be plural 'articles' because it refers to multiple items. Pronouns and sentence structure are corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, I believe the thing I got would change over time because I through that time I will learn more and and I will get more experience, knowledge and that will change my mind and my plans.

✓ Yes, I believe the things I get will change over time because through that time I will learn more and gain more experience and knowledge, and that will change my mind and my plans.

'Thing' should be plural 'things' to match the context. 'Got' is changed to 'get' to fit present/future context. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I prefer handwriting because I am obsessed with my, my handwriting thing.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I am obsessed with my handwriting.

The phrase 'my, my handwriting thing' is redundant and awkward. Simplifying to 'my handwriting' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I like seeing it's actually in a reality world because it gives me that, I don't know, feel like something butterfly or something, I don't know.

✓ I like seeing it actually in the real world because it gives me a feeling like butterflies or something, I don't know.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'It's actually in a reality world' is corrected to 'it actually in the real world' for natural expression. 'Feel like something butterfly' is corrected to 'a feeling like butterflies' for grammatical correctness and clarity.