写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "enjoy experience" instead of "express my experiences." Try to use clearer and more natural expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I write quite often because I enjoy expressing my thoughts and ideas. For example, I like to write journal entries and short stories, which help me improve my writing skills and expand my vocabulary.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your thoughts before speaking and use complete sentences. Clearly state what you like to write and why, using linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: I like to write stories about our culture because they are interesting and meaningful to me. Writing these stories helps me share our traditions and values with others.

建議: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrasing and grammar errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to explain why your writing changes over time.

範例: Absolutely. I believe the things I write change because my thoughts and experiences evolve as I grow. Writing allows me to reflect these changes in my work.

建議: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use more natural expressions and provide specific reasons for your preference.

範例: I prefer typing because it is easier and faster for me. I often use my computer or smartphone, which makes typing more convenient than handwriting.

× Yes, I write quite often because I enjoy experience, my thoughts and ideas.

✓ Yes, I write quite often because I enjoy expressing my thoughts and ideas.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a verb in the '-ing' form. 'Experience' is a noun here, but the intended meaning is to express thoughts and ideas, so 'expressing' is the correct form.

× For example, I like to write the journal entries and short stories which help me improve my writing skills and learn new vocabulary.

✓ For example, I like to write journal entries and short stories which help me improve my writing skills and learn new vocabulary.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'journal entries' because it refers to journal entries in general, not specific ones.

× I'd like to write, uh, some cute and, uh, some stories in, uh, our culture about our, uh, our culture.

✓ I'd like to write some cute stories about our culture.

The phrase 'stories in our culture about our culture' is redundant and awkward. The preposition 'about' is appropriate to indicate the topic of the stories. Also, removing filler words improves clarity.

× Uh, I am enjoy to write this because I enjoy to write, uh, types type this, uh, stories.

✓ I enjoy writing these types of stories because I like to write them.

The phrase 'I am enjoy' is incorrect; 'enjoy' is a stative verb and does not use the continuous form. Also, 'enjoy to write' is incorrect; 'enjoy' should be followed by a verb in '-ing' form. 'Types type this stories' is unclear and corrected to 'these types of stories'.

× Uh, absolutely. I think, uh, the things that I wrote were the change because the, my uh, mind world is, uh, because I write and I enjoyed that.

✓ Absolutely. I think the things that I write change because my mindset changes as I write, and I enjoy that.

The original sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. Since the question is about things the student writes, present tense 'write' and 'change' are appropriate. 'Mind world' is unclear and replaced with 'mindset' for clarity.

× I prefer typing because the easy to me and every time I use my computer or my smartphone it is good to me.

✓ I prefer typing because it is easy for me, and every time I use my computer or my smartphone, it is convenient for me.

The phrase 'the easy to me' is incorrect; 'easy' is an adjective and needs a subject and verb. Also, 'good to me' is awkward; 'convenient for me' or 'good for me' is better. Added 'it is' for sentence completeness.