写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时应避免语法错误，如"I just too busy"应为"I am just too busy"，并且回答可以更简洁自然，避免冗余。

範例: I don't write much these days, but I keep journals when I have time. I used to enjoy writing short stories, but now I'm too busy.

建議: 回答内容丰富，但句子结构稍显重复，建议使用连接词使表达更流畅自然。

範例: I enjoy writing fiction stories because I used to be a big fan and read many of them. Inspired by these stories, I like creating my own characters and plots. Moreover, writing allows me to express my imagination and escape from reality.

建議: 回答中存在语法和表达错误，句子不完整且不连贯，建议加强语法基础，使用清晰的句子结构。

範例: Yes, I believe what I write changes over time because my experiences become more complex and deeper. Therefore, my writing now is quite different from when I was in school.

建議: 回答中表达不清且有语法错误，建议简化句子并明确表达观点，同时使用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: I prefer handwriting because it feels more personal. However, typing is easier for editing and rearranging paragraphs, and it doesn't make my hand sore.

× I don't write a lot of things these days, but I do keep some journals when I have time.

✓ I don't write a lot these days, but I do keep some journals when I have time.

“a lot of things”在这里不太自然，通常说“I don't write a lot”表示写得不多即可，去掉“of things”更符合英语习惯。

× I used to love writing little stories but now I just too busy for that.

✓ I used to love writing little stories but now I am just too busy for that.

句中缺少系动词“am”，导致句子不完整。应使用“am”连接主语和表语。

× I enjoy writing, especially the fiction stories because I used to be a fiction story fan and read a lot of them.

✓ I enjoy writing, especially fiction stories because I used to be a fiction story fan and read a lot of them.

“the fiction stories”中“the”不必要且不自然，去掉“the”更符合习惯用法。

× I was inspired by those stories and really want to create my own characteristics and plots.

✓ I was inspired by those stories and really want to create my own characters and plots.

“characteristics”意为“特征”，此处应使用“characters”表示“人物角色”。

× Yes, I think the things are right definitely change over time because my experience that size naturally became more complicate, more complex and more and deeper.

✓ Yes, I think the things I write definitely change over time because my experiences naturally become more complicated, more complex, and deeper.

“the things are right definitely change”语序错误，应为“the things I write definitely change”；“experience that size”不通顺，应为“my experiences”；“complicate”应为形容词“complicated”；“more and deeper”结构错误，应为“and deeper”。

× So when I wrote it's quite different from I used to ride when I was in school I.

✓ So what I wrote is quite different from what I used to write when I was in school.

句子结构混乱，时态和词汇错误：“it's”应为“is”，“I used to ride”应为“I used to write”；“when I was in school I”语序错误，应为“when I was in school”。

× Yes, I think I prefer handwriting much more because when you write a long story, writing on the computer can obviously easy to add it and rearrange the different paragraphs and also it's will not make your hand feel so sore.

✓ Yes, I think I prefer handwriting much more because when you write a long story, writing on the computer can obviously easily add and rearrange different paragraphs, and also it will not make your hand feel so sore.

“can obviously easy to add it”中“easy”应为副词“easily”，且“add it”中“it”多余；“it's will not”应为“it will not”。