写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to keep your response concise and directly answer the question. Use past tense consistently when talking about the past, and avoid repeating the same idea. For example, you could say: "I didn't write much recently, but when I was in high school, I wrote a lot because my teachers gave us many assignments, and I was interested in social issues."

範例: I don't write much nowadays, but during high school, I wrote frequently because my teachers assigned many essays, and I was quite interested in social topics.

建議: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using correct verb tenses and more precise vocabulary. Also, try to link your ideas smoothly. For example, you might say: "In high school, I mostly wrote about social issues because I cared about society. Nowadays, I sometimes write journals to express my personal feelings."

範例: Back in high school, I mostly wrote about social issues since I cared deeply about society. Nowadays, I occasionally keep journals to reflect on my personal feelings.

建議: Your answer is too brief and lacks detail. Try to expand your response by explaining how and why your writing has changed. For example: "Yes, I believe the things I write have changed because my attitude towards life has evolved over the years, leading me to focus on different topics and express myself differently."

範例: Yes, I think my writing has changed over time because as my outlook on life has developed, I tend to write about different subjects and express my thoughts in new ways.

建議: Your answer is clear but could be more natural by using smoother linking words and avoiding repetition. For example: "I prefer typing because I write very slowly by hand, but I can type much faster, which makes it easier for me."

範例: I prefer typing since I write quite slowly by hand, but typing allows me to write much faster and more comfortably.

× No, I don't when I was in high school, I write a lot 'cause at that time my teacher would give us assignments to ask us to write and I write a lot 'cause at that time I care about the society and.

✓ No, I didn't. When I was in high school, I wrote a lot because at that time my teacher would give us assignments asking us to write, and I wrote a lot because at that time I cared about society.

The sentence mixes present tense ('don't', 'write', 'care') with past time references ('when I was in high school'). To maintain consistency, past tense verbs ('didn't', 'wrote', 'cared') should be used to match the past time frame. Also, 'ask us to write' is better expressed as 'asking us to write' for grammatical correctness.

× In my high school time, I write mostly about the society because I care about the society and now sometimes I write some journals which contains my personal feelings.

✓ In my high school time, I wrote mostly about society because I cared about it, and now sometimes I write journals that contain my personal feelings.

The phrase 'I write' and 'I care' should be in past tense ('wrote', 'cared') to reflect the past period 'in my high school time'. Also, 'contains' should be 'contain' to agree with the plural noun 'journals'. The definite article 'the' before 'society' is unnecessary here.

× No, I don't when I was in high school, I write a lot 'cause at that time my teacher would give us assignments to ask us to write and I write a lot 'cause at that time I care about the society and.

✓ No, I didn't. When I was in high school, I wrote a lot because at that time my teacher would give us assignments asking us to write, and I wrote a lot because at that time I cared about society.

The phrase 'to ask us to write' is incorrect; it should be 'asking us to write' to correctly use the present participle form after 'assignments' to indicate purpose.

× No, I don't when I was in high school, I write a lot 'cause at that time my teacher would give us assignments to ask us to write and I write a lot 'cause at that time I care about the society and.

✓ No, I didn't. When I was in high school, I wrote a lot because at that time my teacher would give us assignments asking us to write, and I wrote a lot because at that time I cared about society.

The phrase 'the society' is incorrect here; 'society' is an uncountable noun and does not require the definite article 'the' in this context.

× In my high school time, I write mostly about the society because I care about the society and now sometimes I write some journals which contains my personal feelings.

✓ In my high school time, I wrote mostly about society because I cared about it, and now sometimes I write journals that contain my personal feelings.

Similarly, 'the society' is incorrect; 'society' should be used without 'the' when speaking generally.

× In my high school time, I write mostly about the society because I care about the society and now sometimes I write some journals which contains my personal feelings.

✓ In my high school time, I wrote mostly about society because I cared about it, and now sometimes I write journals that contain my personal feelings.

The relative clause 'which contains my personal feelings' is incorrect because 'journals' is plural; the verb should be 'contain' to agree with the plural subject.