写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时应避免重复和冗长，语言更自然流畅。可以简洁明了地表达专业背景和写作偏好，同时增加具体细节。

範例: Yes, I write a lot because my major is drama, cinema, television, and literature. I often write romantic scripts alone, which makes me feel happy and inspired.

建議: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，内容重复。建议用更准确的词汇表达兴趣，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: I like writing scripts, not only because of my major but also because I recently developed a hobby for murder mystery scripts. They are very interesting, so I want to create new ones.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议用更准确的时态和连接词，具体说明情绪如何影响写作内容。

範例: I think what I write depends on my emotions. For example, when I'm happy, I write comedy scripts, but when I'm sad, I prefer to write more serious ones.

建議: 回答未完成且表达不够连贯。建议完整表达观点，使用连接词，并具体说明原因。

範例: When I was in high school, I preferred handwriting because it helped me express my emotions better. However, now I prefer typing since it's more convenient and I can carry my scripts anywhere.

× my major is called the drama, cinema, television and literature

✓ my major is called drama, cinema, television and literature

这里的'drama, cinema, television and literature'是专业名称的集合，不需要加定冠词'the'，且'drama'不需要加冠词，保持复数形式或集合名词形式即可。

× I prefer to stay alone and write some romantic scripts, which makes me feel moved and happy.

✓ I prefer to be alone and write some romantic scripts, which make me feel moved and happy.

动词短语应为'prefer to be alone'而非'stay alone'，且关系代词引导的从句中主语是复数'scripts'，谓语动词应为'make'而非'makes'。

× these days I developed a new hobby which named the script Murder.

✓ these days I have developed a new hobby called the script Murder.

'developed'应使用现在完成时'have developed'表示最近发生的动作，'which named'应改为'called'来正确表达被命名的意思。

× I enjoyed it.

✓ I enjoy it.

根据上下文，描述的是现在的兴趣爱好，应该使用一般现在时'enjoy'，而非过去时'enjoyed'。

× It's very much so I want to write some new scripts.

✓ It's very interesting, so I want to write some new scripts.

'It's very much'表达不准确，应使用形容词描述兴趣或感受，如'very interesting'。

× I think it maybe depend on my emotion.

✓ I think it may depend on my emotion.

'maybe'是副词，表示'也许'，此处应使用情态动词'may'表示可能性。

× if I'm happy and I will try to write some comedy scripts, but if I'm so sad or upset, I will try to write some others.

✓ if I'm happy, I will try to write some comedy scripts, but if I'm sad or upset, I will try to write others.

句子中'and'连接不当，应用逗号分隔条件句；'so sad'中'so'多余；'some others'中'others'已含复数含义，前面不需加'some'。

× when I was a high school student, I preferred to choose handwriting because I think it makes me express my emotion better.

✓ when I was a high school student, I preferred handwriting because I thought it helped me express my emotions better.

'preferred to choose handwriting'冗余，直接用'preferred handwriting'更自然；'I think'应改为过去时'I thought'以保持时态一致；'makes me express'应改为'helped me express'更符合表达习惯。

× But as I grew up, I prefer to use typing because I think it's more convenient.

✓ But as I grew up, I preferred to use typing because I thought it was more convenient.

前半句为过去时态，后半句应保持时态一致，使用过去时'preferred'和'thought'。

× I could bring my scripts everywhere I go and.

✓ I can bring my scripts everywhere I go.

句子末尾的'and'多余且导致句子不完整，应删除。