写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答表达不够清晰，语法和词汇使用存在较多错误，导致意思难以理解。建议简化句子结构，使用简单且准确的词汇，避免重复和无关内容，直接回答问题并给出具体理由。

範例: I used to write a lot when I was younger because I enjoyed it and my daughter also liked writing. However, now I am busy with work and study, so I don't have much time to write. I believe writing is a good habit because it helps you express your thoughts and feel good.

建議: 回答中表达的内容较为混乱，建议使用更清晰的句子结构，明确说明喜欢写什么内容及原因。可以增加具体细节，使回答更丰富且连贯。

範例: I like to write about my daily activities and thoughts. Writing helps me express my emotions and reflect on areas I can improve, which motivates me to become a better person.

建議: 回答不连贯且难以理解，建议先明确问题含义，再用简洁的句子表达自己的观点。可以尝试用简单句说明是否会改变写作内容及原因。

範例: I don't think the things I write will change much because I usually write about my true feelings and thoughts. However, in the future, I might write about new experiences that make me feel better.

建議: 回答表达不清晰，建议直接说明偏好并给出具体理由。使用简单明了的句子，避免重复和无关内容。

範例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me express my emotions better. Writing by hand feels more personal and real compared to typing.

× Uh, when I was gonna, I want to not because first of all like Whiting and 2nd and my daughter also after awesome to write.

✓ Uh, when I was going to, I didn't want to because first of all, like writing, and secondly, my daughter also likes to write.

这里的“was gonna”是口语缩写，应改为正式的“was going to”。“I want to not”时态和表达不正确，应改为过去时的否定形式“didn't want to”。另外，“Whiting”拼写错误，应为“writing”。句子结构混乱，需要调整顺序使其更通顺。

× But now I have not things to do such as study at work, so I have no time to write about.

✓ But now I don't have things to do such as studying at work, so I have no time to write about.

“I have not things”表达不正确，应该用“I don't have things”表示否定。

× I have no time to write about.

✓ I have no time to write.

“write about”后面需要具体的对象，这里没有，导致表达不完整，应去掉“about”。

× I like to write something about me such as what I do today and what I thought.

✓ I like to write something about myself such as what I did today and what I thought.

“about me”应改为反身代词“about myself”，表示关于自己的内容。

× such as what I do today and what I thought.

✓ such as what I did today and what I thought.

描述过去发生的事情，动词应使用过去时，“do”改为“did”。

× I will write down and express my emotions and feel and mainly field what can what can be improving so that will find myself to add, change myself to be better.

✓ I will write down and express my emotions and feelings, and mainly reflect on what can be improved so that I can find myself to add and change to be better.

“feel”应为名词“feelings”；“field”应为“reflect”；“what can what can be improving”重复且用词错误，应为“what can be improved”；句子结构混乱，需调整使表达清晰。

× I don't think my otherwise I would have tried to 'cause this is whatever the way to what I want is what I like and but and I don't like any other general.

✓ I don't think so, otherwise I would have tried, because this is whatever way I want and like, and I don't like anything else generally.

“my otherwise”表达不清，应改为“I don't think so, otherwise”；“'cause”应为“because”；句子结构混乱，需调整使语义明确。

× I think in the future it for something made me feel better.

✓ I think in the future it will be something that makes me feel better.

描述未来事件，需使用将来时“will be”；“made”应为现在时“makes”，因为是一般现在时表示习惯或事实。

× I will I'm trying to pass now I would want to widen my.

✓ I am trying to improve now and I want to widen my skills.

句子结构混乱，时态混用，应统一为现在进行时和一般现在时，表达清晰完整。

× When I'm writing, I perceptual power up to him riding big 'cause it's not the only operator the ability to arrive about.

✓ When I'm writing, I feel more powerful because it's not the only way to express my ability to write.

“perceptual power up to him riding big”表达不清，应改为“I feel more powerful”；“operator the ability to arrive about”语义不明，改为“way to express my ability to write”。

× Also it kind of shows or what what your emotion better and in info influence mean.

✓ Also, it kind of shows your emotions better and influences the meaning.

“or what what your emotion better and in info influence mean”语法混乱，应简化为“shows your emotions better and influences the meaning”。

× So I think if you make if you if you use handwriting is real.

✓ So I think if you use handwriting, it is real.

句子重复且缺少主语，应简化为“if you use handwriting, it is real”。