写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中语法和表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，建议简化句子，避免重复，使用更准确的表达方式。

範例: I don't write a lot because I prefer reading. Reading helps me absorb knowledge and different ideas from people around the world.

建議: 回答内容较为混乱，表达不够清晰，建议使用更连贯的句子，并具体说明写作内容和原因。

範例: I like to write about funny things that happen in my daily life. This helps me remember special moments and appreciate the small joys even during difficult times.

建議: 表达不清晰，语法错误较多，建议理清思路，使用简单句表达观点，并举例说明。

範例: Yes, my writing changes as I grow older because my experiences and views change. For example, my diary entries used to be emotional, but now they are more straightforward and positive.

建議: 回答中有语法和表达错误，建议简化句子，明确表达偏好，并避免不相关内容。

範例: It depends on the situation. I prefer typing for homework because it's easy to save and find information online. But for personal writing like diaries, I prefer handwriting.

× Well, I don't always write a lot because compared with writing and the kind of person that prefer reading because reading is like absorb the knowledge and different ideas from different people and they can expand my source around the world.

✓ Well, I don't always write a lot because compared with writing, I am the kind of person who prefers reading because reading is like absorbing knowledge and different ideas from different people, and they can expand my sources around the world.

这里存在单复数错误和句子结构问题。“the kind of person that prefer reading”中“person”是单数，谓语动词应为“prefers”。另外，“reading is like absorb the knowledge”中“absorb”应为动名词“absorbing”。建议注意主谓一致和动词形式的正确使用。

× Most of the time I just write some there is to record the funny things happening in my daily life.

✓ Most of the time I just write some notes to record the funny things happening in my daily life.

句中“some there is”不符合语法，应改为“some notes”或其他复数名词，表示写的内容。注意名词的单复数形式和搭配。

× In that case, I can keep track of everything that's happening in my life and be appreciated to the small things and they also keep me to have a memory of the heavy things in life.

✓ In that case, I can keep track of everything that's happening in my life and appreciate the small things, and they also help me to have memories of the difficult things in life.

“be appreciated to the small things”用法错误，应为“appreciate the small things”，动词“appreciate”后直接接宾语。且“keep me to have a memory”表达不当，应改为“help me to have memories”。注意介词和动词搭配的正确使用。

× Yes, of course, because generally as I grew older, my perspective toward different things will be different because I can more experience for my daily life.

✓ Yes, of course, because generally as I grow older, my perspective toward different things becomes different because I can have more experience in my daily life.

“as I grew older”时态不匹配，前后时态应一致，且“will be different”应改为“becomes different”以符合现在时态。动词“can more experience”表达错误，应为“can have more experience”。注意时态一致和动词搭配。

× Take a writing dairy as example.

✓ Take writing a diary as an example.

“Take a writing dairy as example”中“writing dairy”拼写错误，应为“writing a diary”，且“as example”前应加冠词“an”。注意拼写和冠词使用。

× So before I was really easy to become upside head, but no more like straightforward and outgoing and takes in.

✓ So before, I was really easily upset, but now I am more straightforward and outgoing and open-minded.

“easy to become upside head”表达错误，应为“easily upset”；“no more like straightforward and outgoing and takes in”语法混乱，应改为“now I am more straightforward and outgoing and open-minded”。注意词汇选择和句子结构。

× When I am trying to do my homework, most of the time I prefer typing because they can be easily saved.

✓ When I am trying to do my homework, most of the time I prefer typing because it can be easily saved.

“they can be easily saved”指代不明确，前文“typing”是不可数名词，应使用单数代词“it”。注意代词与先行词的数一致。

× In the iOS it was a town computer to search for materials online.

✓ On iOS, I use a laptop computer to search for materials online.

“In the iOS it was a town computer”表达不清且错误，正确表达应为“On iOS, I use a laptop computer”。注意介词和词汇的正确使用。