写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Та илүү тодорхой, грамматик алдааг засаж, өгүүлбэрээ хязгаарлах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I love to write whenever I have free time. I usually write essays or keep a little diary." гэж хэлж болно.

範例: Yes, I love to write whenever I have free time. I usually write essays or keep a little diary.

建議: Хариултдаа илүү тодорхой, логик холбоос үг ашиглаж, алдааг засах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I like to write fairy tales for my little brother because he finds them funny and entertaining. Writing these stories makes me feel happy and fulfilled."

範例: I like to write fairy tales for my little brother because he finds them funny and entertaining. Writing these stories makes me feel happy and fulfilled.

建議: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, грамматик алдааг засаж, холбоос үг ашиглах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "Maybe in the future, my writing style will change. I am interested in academic essays and life stories, but I might also write fictional stories."

範例: Maybe in the future, my writing style will change. I am interested in academic essays and life stories, but I might also write fictional stories.

建議: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, алдааг засаж, холбоос үг ашиглах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I actually like typing, but handwriting makes me feel relaxed and calm when I write."

範例: I actually like typing, but handwriting makes me feel relaxed and calm when I write.

× Yes, I love to write whenever I got a free time I love to write essay or just my little diary.

✓ Yes, I love to write whenever I have free time. I love to write essays or just my little diary.

The verb 'got' is past tense but the sentence context requires present tense 'have' to indicate habitual action. Also, 'a free time' is incorrect; 'free time' is uncountable and does not need an article. 'Essay' should be plural 'essays' to match the general statement about writing.

× Yes, I love to write whenever I got a free time I love to write essay or just my little diary.

✓ Yes, I love to write whenever I have free time. I love to write essays or just my little diary.

'A free time' is incorrect because 'time' in this context is uncountable and should not have an article. The correct phrase is 'free time' without 'a'.

× Yes, I love to write whenever I got a free time I love to write essay or just my little diary.

✓ Yes, I love to write whenever I have free time. I love to write essays or just my little diary.

'Essay' should be plural 'essays' because the speaker refers to writing essays in general, not a single essay.

× I like to write fairy tales to my little brother because you find it so funny and entertaining.

✓ I like to write fairy tales to my little brother because he finds them so funny and entertaining.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrectly used; it should be 'he' to refer to 'my little brother'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural 'fairy tales'.

× And whenever I write it to my brother, I will I will feel the hapiness, the grabbing on myself.

✓ And whenever I write to my brother, I feel happiness and a sense of fulfillment.

'Hapiness' is misspelled; correct spelling is 'happiness'. The phrase 'the grabbing on myself' is unclear and ungrammatical; 'a sense of fulfillment' better expresses the intended meaning. Also, 'I will I will feel' is repetitive and unnecessary; simple present 'I feel' is appropriate here.

× Maybe in the future my writing types may change.

✓ Maybe in the future my writing styles may change.

'May' is correctly used to express possibility. However, 'writing types' is awkward; 'writing styles' is more natural.

× Specially to academic kind of things, I'm really into an essay or life story kind of things and think fictional things.

✓ Especially academic kinds of things, I'm really into essays, life stories, and fictional works.

'Specially to' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'especially'. 'Kind of things' should be plural 'kinds of things'. 'An essay or life story kind of things' is ungrammatical; better to say 'essays, life stories'. 'Think fictional things' is unclear; 'fictional works' is more appropriate.

× So in your future I might write fictional things.

✓ So in the future I might write fictional things.

'Your future' is incorrect here; the speaker refers to their own future, so 'the future' is correct.

× I actually liked the boss, but handwriting gives me the relaxing and just calling feelings whenever I writing.

✓ I actually like the boss, but handwriting gives me relaxing and calming feelings whenever I write.

'Liked' is past tense but the context suggests present preference, so 'like' is correct. 'The relaxing and just calling feelings' is incorrect; should be 'relaxing and calming feelings'. 'Whenever I writing' is incorrect; should be 'whenever I write'.