写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to give a clear and direct answer to the question first, then add supporting details in a logical and coherent way. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. Use simple, correct sentences and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

範例: Yes, I write quite often. When I was younger, I used to write a lot in my notebooks. Nowadays, I write mainly for work and personal notes. Writing is an important skill that helps me organize my thoughts.

建議: Answer the question directly by specifying what you like to write and why. Use complete sentences and linking words to connect your ideas clearly. Avoid grammatical errors and be more specific.

範例: I like to write in my pocket diary, especially during the summer. I record daily events and my thoughts because it helps me remember important moments and reflect on my experiences.

建議: Focus on answering the question clearly and logically. Avoid confusing or unrelated statements. Use linking words to explain your opinion and reasons. Keep sentences simple and relevant.

範例: I don't think the things I write will change much because writing is just a hobby for me. It helps me communicate my thoughts and feelings clearly.

建議: Give a clear preference and explain why. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: I like both typing and handwriting because they are useful in different situations. However, I prefer handwriting when I am on the go since I can quickly jot down notes in my pocket diary whenever I remember something.

× Yes, 'cause writing is my office when I was a youngster that then I was, uh, writing a lot, lot of my writing the page like nowaday I am writing when I, I'm doing, I'm doing a free so.

✓ Yes, because writing was my hobby when I was a youngster; back then, I wrote a lot, many pages. Nowadays, I write when I have free time.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'writing' as a noun and verb in a confusing way and misuses 'office' instead of 'hobby'. The present participle 'writing' is overused and the sentence structure is unclear. Correcting to past tense 'wrote' and clarifying the meaning improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× It is a good skillset. You have time to avoid.

✓ It is a good skillset. You have time to develop it.

The phrase 'time to avoid' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'time to develop' or 'practice' the skill. The preposition 'to' followed by 'avoid' does not fit the context.

× Yeah, I'm writing a lot of things for the summer time.

✓ Yes, I write a lot of things during the summer.

The present continuous 'I'm writing' is not appropriate here because the action is habitual or general during summer. The simple present 'I write' fits better. Also, 'for the summer time' is better expressed as 'during the summer'.

× I'm looking at things and then I'm right.

✓ I observe things and then I write.

The phrase 'I'm looking at things' is acceptable but 'I'm right' is incorrect; it should be 'I write'. Also, 'looking at' is better replaced with 'observe' for clarity.

× I writing in my pocket diary so.

✓ I write in my pocket diary.

The verb 'writing' is incorrectly used without auxiliary verb 'am' for present continuous. Since the action is habitual, simple present 'write' is appropriate. Also, 'so' at the end is unnecessary.

× Lot of things happens our daily lives.

✓ Lots of things happen in our daily lives.

'Lot' should be 'Lots' to indicate plural, and 'happens' should be 'happen' to agree with plural subject 'things'. Also, 'our daily lives' needs the preposition 'in'.

× I don't think so. It wouldn't be changed anything.

✓ I don't think so. It wouldn't change anything.

The modal verb 'would' should be followed by the base form of the verb 'change', not the passive form 'be changed'. The sentence is in active voice.

× So is it is just a hobby? What you are right, what you are.

✓ So it is just a hobby? What you write, what you are.

The sentence is unclear and contains pronoun misuse. 'What you are right' should be 'what you write'. The phrase 'what you are' is incomplete and unclear.

× Listening it is good, good for communication it is.

✓ Listening is good; it is good for communication.

The sentence structure is awkward and repetitive. 'Listening it is good' should be 'Listening is good'. The phrase 'good for communication it is' is better as 'it is good for communication'.

× I have a hobby when I was. Cool.

✓ I had a hobby when I was young.

The sentence is incomplete and uses present perfect 'have' incorrectly with past time 'when I was'. It should be simple past 'had'. 'Cool' is unclear and likely intended as 'young' or similar.

× Yeah, I like a boat of things, writing and typing, so both are good in different type of locations.

✓ Yes, I like a lot of things: writing and typing. Both are good in different types of locations.

'a boat of things' is a mishearing or typo for 'a lot of things'. 'type' should be plural 'types' to agree with 'different'. The sentence is split for clarity.

× I'm pepper to the right thing because every time I have no keep that typing in my poker.

✓ I prefer writing because I can't always keep typing on my phone.

'I'm pepper to the right thing' is incorrect; it should be 'I prefer writing'. 'have no keep' is incorrect; 'can't always keep' fits better. 'poker' is a mispronunciation of 'phone'.

× So I I have keep the diary in my pocket when I reminded anything, so I'm writing it.

✓ So I keep the diary in my pocket to write down anything I remember.

'I have keep' is incorrect; it should be 'I keep'. 'when I reminded anything' is incorrect; 'to write down anything I remember' is clearer and grammatically correct.