花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, remove fillers, correct repetition and article errors, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences total.

範例: Yes, I love flowers because they symbolize unity. For example, I often notice how flowers grow together in clusters, which always makes me feel calm.

建議: Avoid absolute statements and repetition. Give a direct answer, then a specific example or reason using a linking word. Fix article and plural forms.

範例: Yes, many people I know love flowers. For instance, my friend paints floral scenes because she finds their colors soothing and their scent relaxing.

建議: Be direct and organized. Begin with a clear contrasting sentence, then add one specific detail with a linking word. Remove fillers and use correct quantifiers (e.g., 'a few').

範例: Not really; there aren’t many flowers near my home, but my college campus has many beds of flowers. For example, I water and trim the rose bushes there every weekend.

建議: Reduce hesitations and organize your answer: give a clear frequency word, reason, and one specific example. Use correct plural and article forms and avoid repeating fillers.

範例: Sometimes I photograph flowers because I enjoy photography. For example, last week I took several close-up shots of jasmine in my garden when the light was good.

建議: Answer clearly with general statement then specific occasions; correct grammar (plural, verb forms) and remove fillers. Provide one specific personal example concisely.

範例: Generally, people do not send flowers very often, but they do on special occasions such as Eid, weddings, and birthdays. For example, my brother gave me tulips on my last birthday, which I loved.

× Uh, yes, I love flowers because I think they that they are the symbol of unity.

✓ Uh, yes, I love flowers because I think they are the symbol of unity.

Duplicate pronoun 'they' is unnecessary and makes the sentence ungrammatical. Remove the extra 'that they' so the clause reads 'I think they are the symbol of unity.' Also 'the symbol of unity' is acceptable if referring to flowers collectively.

× Wherever you see flower, you will see them in a group.

✓ Wherever you see flowers, you will see them in a group.

The noun must be plural when referring to flowers in general. 'Flower' should be 'flowers' to match the plural pronoun 'them' and the general meaning.

× I think there there is no one who doesn't love flowers.

✓ I think there is no one who doesn't love flowers.

Duplicate 'there' is an error. Use a single 'there is' to form the existential construction. Also note 'no one who doesn't' is acceptable for the intended meaning.

× Everybody does, because the person who loves flower is very calm.

✓ Everybody does, because the person who loves flowers is very calm.

When referring to the type in general, use the plural 'flowers' rather than the singular 'flower' after 'loves'. This matches general reference and common collocation.

× When you love flowers, you don't only love their smell, you also love their beautiful colors, their nature.

✓ When you love flowers, you don't only love their smell; you also love their beautiful colors and their nature.

Comma splice and list punctuation: join clauses properly (semicolon or conjunction) and use 'and' between list items. The original comma between independent clauses is incorrect. Also 'their nature' is acceptable but clearer with 'and' before it.

× No, there aren't many flowers where I live, but in my college there are a lot of flowers.

✓ No, there aren't many flowers where I live, but at my college there are a lot of flowers.

'In my college' is not the usual preposition; use 'at my college' to indicate location related to an institution.

× Umm and I love to water them.

✓ Umm, and I love to water them.

Add a comma after the interjection for clarity. Grammatically the sentence is fine otherwise.

× In my house there are only few flowers but I trim them.

✓ In my house there are only a few flowers, but I trim them.

'Only few' is incorrect; use 'only a few' to indicate a small number. Also add a comma before the contrasting clause 'but I trim them.'

× Uh, sometimes I do when I am in a mood of photography umm as I love photography so I mostly take the photos of flower but umm there are few flowers.

✓ Uh, sometimes I do when I am in the mood for photography. Umm, as I love photography, I mostly take photos of flowers, but there are few flowers.

Use 'in the mood for' not 'in a mood of'; use 'photos of flowers' (plural) and 'take photos' rather than 'take the photos'. Insert commas to separate clauses. 'There are few flowers' should be 'there are few flowers' or better 'there are only a few flowers' if intended.

× Uh, most of the time they don't, but on some occasions like on Eid and on marriage and on birthday they send flowers to other.

✓ Uh, most of the time they don't, but on some occasions like Eid, weddings, and birthdays they send flowers to others.

Use plural nouns for recurring events ('weddings', 'birthdays') and correct 'on marriage' to 'weddings'. 'To other' is wrong; use 'to others'. Also remove extra 'on' before Eid.

× For example on my birthday my brother bring me flowers and umm he bring me tulips.

✓ For example, on my birthday my brother brought me flowers and umm he brought me tulips.

Talking about a past event requires past tense: 'bring' should be 'brought' for third person singular past. Add commas for clarity.

× I love tulips the most but mostly of the people don't.

✓ I love tulips the most, but most people don't.

'Mostly of the people' is ungrammatical. Use 'most people' to indicate the majority. Add a comma before the contrast 'but'.