花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 'flower'는 복수형 'flowers'로 사용해야 하며, 'make me feeling good' 대신 'make me feel good'이 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 'some flower they have meaningful' 부분은 'some flowers have special meanings'로 수정하는 것이 좋습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하세요.

範例: Yes, I love flowers because they have a pleasant fragrance that makes me feel happy. Also, some flowers have special meanings, which makes me like certain flowers even more.

建議: 문법과 어휘 사용에 오류가 많습니다. 'She's quite often go'는 'She often goes'로, 'collapse many different kind of flowers'는 'collects many different kinds of flowers'로 수정해야 합니다. 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 표현하도록 연습하세요.

範例: Yes, my mom loves flowers. She often goes to flower shops to buy the flowers she likes, and she collects many different kinds. I think this hobby makes her happy and relaxed.

建議: 문장이 매우 어색하고 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 'around my house'와 'nearby park'를 명확히 연결하고, 'I can easy to pass to flower way'는 'I can easily walk through a path full of flowers'로 표현하는 것이 좋습니다. 간결하고 명확한 문장 구성을 연습하세요.

範例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live because my house is near a park. I can easily walk along a path full of beautiful flowers.

建議: 문장이 단절되고 어색합니다. 'pretty often' 대신 'quite often'이 자연스럽고, 'such a beautiful flower'는 'beautiful flowers'로 복수형을 사용하세요. 'So when I walk. Go away.'는 'So when I go for a walk'로 수정해야 합니다. 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I take photos of flowers quite often because I really like beautiful flowers. So when I go for a walk, I always take pictures of them.

建議: 답변이 불완전하고 문법적으로도 문제가 많습니다. 'my mom generations'는 'my mother's generation'으로, 'when they getting old'는 'when they get older'로 수정해야 합니다. 또한, 문장이 중단되어 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 완전한 문장으로 명확하게 답변하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: People, especially from my mother's generation, often send flowers to others. I think as they get older, they become more emotional and like to express their feelings through flowers.

× Yes I do because flower have really good smell that make me feeling good.

✓ Yes I do because flowers have a really good smell that makes me feel good.

The noun 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers to flowers in general. The verb 'have' agrees with plural subject 'flowers'. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'smell'. 'Feeling' should be 'feel' to correctly follow 'makes me'.

× Also some flower they have meaningful that make me like king flower more.

✓ Also some flowers have meaning that makes me like king flowers more.

'Flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match 'some'. 'Meaningful' is an adjective, but the noun 'meaning' is appropriate here. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'meaning'. 'King flower' should be plural 'king flowers' to be consistent.

× She's quite often go to flower shop and get some what she wanted to get and she collapse many different kind of flowers.

✓ She quite often goes to the flower shop and gets what she wants to get and she collects many different kinds of flowers.

The verbs 'go' and 'get' need to be in third person singular form 'goes' and 'gets' to agree with 'she'. 'Collapse' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'collects'. 'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' to match 'many different'. 'Some what' should be 'what' or 'some' but 'what' fits better here.

× Yes, it is because around my house that's nearby park which is I can easy to pass to flower way so.

✓ Yes, it is because around my house there is a nearby park which I can easily pass to get to the flower path.

The sentence structure is awkward. 'That's nearby park' should be 'there is a nearby park'. 'I can easy to pass' should be 'I can easily pass'. 'Flower way' is better as 'flower path'. Prepositions and articles are corrected for clarity.

× Yes, I think pretty often because I really like such a beautiful flower.

✓ Yes, I think pretty often because I really like such beautiful flowers.

'Flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers generally to flowers. 'Such a beautiful flower' is singular, but the context suggests plural.

× So when I walk. Go away. I always take pictures of flower.

✓ So when I walk away, I always take pictures of flowers.

The sentence is fragmented. 'Walk. Go away.' should be combined as 'walk away'. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers'.

× It is especially my mom generations because I think when they getting old, uh, become more emotion.

✓ It is especially my mom's generation because I think when they get old, they become more emotional.

'Mom generations' should be 'mom's generation' to show possession. 'They getting old' should be 'they get old' for correct tense. 'Become more emotion' should be 'become more emotional' to use the correct adjective form.