花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "it fills me" and "makes me to feel pleasant." Try to use more natural expressions and correct grammar. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas more effectively.

範例: Yes, I love flowers, especially roses and lilies. Growing plants at home makes me feel happy and creates a pleasant atmosphere.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Use proper tenses and sentence structures. Also, try to organise your ideas logically and avoid incomplete sentences. Adding linking words will improve coherence.

範例: Yes, my parents love flowers, especially my mom. I often used to put lily flowers in her hair because they look beautiful on her. My dad also buys flowers for my mom regularly.

建議: Your answer is brief and contains some grammatical errors. Try to provide a more complete response with proper sentence structure and avoid using informal fillers like "so yeah."

範例: No, there are not many flowers where I live because I currently stay in shared accommodation, which doesn't have much greenery.

建議: Your answer is understandable but has some tense inconsistencies and awkward phrasing. Use consistent tenses and clearer expressions. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas unnecessarily.

範例: Yes, I love taking photos of flowers, but not every day. Whenever I see a beautiful flower, I take a picture and post it on Instagram as a hobby.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and contains informal fillers like "like" and "you know." Try to express your ideas more clearly and formally, using proper sentence structure and linking words.

範例: Yes, sending flowers is a tradition in my country. People often give flowers on occasions such as birthdays and weddings, where flowers are used extensively.

× I enjoy growing plants at home because it fills me.

✓ I enjoy growing plants at home because it fills me with joy.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. The verb 'fills' requires an object to complete the meaning. Adding 'with joy' clarifies what 'it' fills the speaker with, making the sentence grammatically correct and meaningful.

× It makes me to feel pleasant and creates the good atmosphere.

✓ It makes me feel pleasant and creates a good atmosphere.

The verb 'makes' is followed by the base form of the verb without 'to'. Also, 'the good atmosphere' should be 'a good atmosphere' because it is a general statement, not referring to a specific atmosphere.

× Yes my parents used to buy flowers especially my mom.

✓ Yes, my parents used to buy flowers, especially my mom.

The sentence is missing commas for clarity. The phrase 'used to buy' is correct for past habitual action. Adding commas improves readability but no tense correction is needed here.

× I used to keep the Lily flowers in her hair it looks so beautiful on her and my dad buy some flowers for my mom and they both.

✓ I used to keep the lily flowers in her hair; it looked so beautiful on her, and my dad bought some flowers for my mom, and they both liked it.

The sentence has multiple tense errors and run-on structure. 'It looks' should be 'it looked' to match past tense. 'My dad buy' should be 'my dad bought' for past tense. Also, the sentence needs proper punctuation to separate ideas.

× No, not much. Currently I'm staying in a shared accommodation, so here there is no lot of flowers, so yeah.

✓ No, not many. Currently, I'm staying in shared accommodation, so there are not a lot of flowers here.

'No lot of flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'not a lot of flowers' or 'not many flowers'. Also, 'there is' should be 'there are' because 'flowers' is plural. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Whenever I see a beautiful flower, I used to picture it and post it on Instagram.

✓ Whenever I see a beautiful flower, I take a picture of it and post it on Instagram.

'Used to' indicates past habitual action, but the context suggests a current habit. Therefore, present simple tense 'take' is appropriate here.

× It's like my hobby but not taking it daily.

✓ It's like my hobby, but I don't do it daily.

The original sentence is awkward and lacks a subject in the second clause. Rephrasing to 'I don't do it daily' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Yes, it's like a tradition, like giving flowers to others is like one of the culture in our family, in our country, like giving flowers to, you know, on a birthday occasion and in wedding there are more flowers will be used.

✓ Yes, it's a tradition; giving flowers to others is part of the culture in our family and country, like on birthdays and weddings where more flowers are used.

The sentence has multiple preposition errors and awkward phrasing. 'One of the culture' should be 'part of the culture'. 'In wedding' should be 'at weddings'. Also, the sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.