花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は自然ですが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現が見られます。例えば、「the clinic I'm working」は「the clinic where I work」とするのが自然です。また、「I grew some flowers and especially roses or any plants」は意味が少し不明瞭なので、具体的にどんな花を育てているかを明確に述べると良いでしょう。

範例: Yes, I love flowers very much. I work at a clinic that has a small garden, where I grow various plants, especially roses. Gardening is one of my favorite hobbies.

建議: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、文法ミスや冗長な部分があります。「flower」は単数形ではなく複数形の"flowers"が適切です。また、文を分けて話すとより明確になります。接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いでしょう。

範例: Yes, my mother loves flowers too. When I was a child, she bought me a bouquet and took me to a gardening shop to buy some plants. That experience made me start enjoying gardening.

建議: 回答は少し不明瞭で文法的な誤りがあります。「not nature around here」は意味が通じにくいので修正が必要です。また、「glasses」は「grasses」の誤りと思われます。文を完結させ、具体的な説明を加えると良いでしょう。

範例: Yes, I live in Karuizawa, a rural area in Japan surrounded by forests and nature. There are many wild flowers and grasses around my house, which I really enjoy seeing.

建議: 文法や表現に多くの誤りがあります。「when I go to this work」は「when I go to work」が正しいです。また、「I found a beautiful flowers」は時制と冠詞の誤りがあります。文章を簡潔にし、正しい時制と冠詞を使うことが重要です。

範例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers I see on my way to work. I usually show these photos to my colleagues and tell them about the flowers.

建議: 回答が途中で終わっており、文法的にも不自然です。「we usually we have the custom」は重複しているので修正が必要です。具体的な例を挙げて、文を完結させることが大切です。

範例: Yes, in Japan, people often send flowers on special occasions such as weddings and graduation ceremonies. It is a common custom to express congratulations.

× I grew some flowers and especially roses or any plants I really love to do the gardening.

✓ I grew some flowers, especially roses, and any plants. I really love to do gardening.

The sentence incorrectly mixes singular and plural forms and lacks proper conjunctions and punctuation. 'Roses' is plural, so 'any plants' should be separated properly. Also, 'do the gardening' is better as 'do gardening' without 'the'.

× My mother loves flower as well.

✓ My mother loves flowers as well.

The noun 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers to flowers in general, not a single flower.

× When I was a child my mother bought me a bouquet of the flowers and my mother took me to the gardening shop and bought me some plants and I really and started to enjoy gardening at that time.

✓ When I was a child, my mother bought me a bouquet of flowers and took me to the gardening shop where she bought me some plants. I really started to enjoy gardening at that time.

The sentence is run-on and has awkward phrasing. 'The flowers' should be 'flowers' without 'the'. Also, 'I really and started' is incorrect; 'and' should be removed. The sentence is better split for clarity.

× Yes, I live in Karizawa, which is a rural area in Japan and it has a lot of forest and not nature around here.

✓ Yes, I live in Karizawa, which is a rural area in Japan. It has a lot of forests and natural areas around here.

'Forest' should be plural 'forests' to indicate multiple areas. 'Not nature' is incorrect; 'natural areas' or 'nature' is better. The sentence is also better split for clarity.

× So a lot of natural flowers and glasses around my house.

✓ So there are a lot of natural flowers and grasses around my house.

'Glasses' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'grasses'. Also, the sentence lacks a verb; adding 'there are' corrects the 'There be issue' as well.

× So a lot of natural flowers and glasses around my house.

✓ So there are a lot of natural flowers and grasses around my house.

The sentence lacks the verb 'there are' to indicate existence, which is necessary in English for such statements.

× Yes I do when I go to this work along the street or I found a beautiful flowers every day.

✓ Yes, I do. When I go to work along the street, I find beautiful flowers every day.

'This work' is incorrect; it should be 'work'. 'Found' is past tense but the sentence context is present, so 'find' is correct. 'A beautiful flowers' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'flowers'; 'beautiful flowers' without 'a' is correct.

× Yes I do when I go to this work along the street or I found a beautiful flowers every day.

✓ Yes, I do. When I go to work along the street, I find beautiful flowers every day.

The verb tense should be present tense 'find' to match the habitual action, not past tense 'found'.

× So I often take the photos of the flowers and I'm usually show my colleagues what the flower is and it's very present time.

✓ So I often take photos of flowers and usually show my colleagues what the flowers are. It's very common nowadays.

'I'm usually show' is incorrect; it should be 'usually show'. 'The photos of the flowers' is better as 'photos of flowers'. 'What the flower is' should be plural 'what the flowers are'. 'It's very present time' is unclear; 'It's very common nowadays' is a better expression.

× So I often take the photos of the flowers and I'm usually show my colleagues what the flower is and it's very present time.

✓ So I often take photos of flowers and usually show my colleagues what the flowers are. It's very common nowadays.

'The flower' should be plural 'the flowers' to match the context of multiple flowers.

× Yes, I think so. In special occasion like weddings or graduation ceremony or something like that, we usually we have the custom in Japan to send the flowers and so we have the.

✓ Yes, I think so. On special occasions like weddings or graduation ceremonies, we usually have the custom in Japan to send flowers.

'In special occasion' should be 'On special occasions' to use correct preposition and plural form. 'We usually we have' has an extra 'we'. 'The flowers' should be 'flowers' without 'the' in this context. The sentence is incomplete and should be finished properly.