花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and coherent by using linking words and avoiding redundancy. For example, instead of repeating 'flowers' multiple times, you could say 'I love them because they make me feel fresh, and I especially enjoy the scent of roses and jasmine.'

範例: Yes, I absolutely love flowers because they make me feel refreshed. For instance, I especially enjoy the scent of roses and jasmine, which I find very calming.

建議: Improve your answer by using the correct tense and adding more specific details. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'all the flowers' and instead specify types or the way she decorates.

範例: Yes, my mother loves flowers too. She often decorates our home with beautiful bouquets of roses and lilies, which brighten up the rooms.

建議: Work on sentence structure and grammar to make your answer clearer and more natural. Use linking words properly and be specific about the types of flowers or gardening practices.

範例: I live in a small village where many people enjoy gardening. As a result, there are plenty of flowers like marigolds and sunflowers in our backyards, which helps everyone feel relaxed and happy.

建議: Clarify your ideas and use natural expressions. Avoid unclear phrases like 'flower sticks' and explain your reason more clearly with linking words.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because I want to create a photo gallery in the future. This way, I can remember their beauty even when they are no longer blooming.

建議: Use correct tense and sentence structure. Be more specific about occasions or reasons people send flowers, and use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, people in my country often prepare bouquets of flowers to send to their loved ones on special occasions like birthdays and anniversaries.

× Well, I live in a small village, however there are several flowers because my all village people like to garden flowers in their backyard area because it feels them relaxed and happy.

✓ Well, I live in a small village; however, there are several flowers because all the people in my village like to garden flowers in their backyard area as it makes them feel relaxed and happy.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'however' without proper punctuation and has awkward phrasing. 'However' should be preceded by a semicolon or period and followed by a comma when connecting two independent clauses. Also, 'my all village people' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'all the people in my village'. Additionally, 'because it feels them relaxed and happy' is incorrect; it should be 'as it makes them feel relaxed and happy' to properly express cause and effect.

× Of course, my mother also liked flowers and she decorated my home with all the flowers.

✓ Of course, my mother also likes flowers and she decorates my home with flowers.

The question is in present tense, so the answer should also be in present tense to maintain consistency. Using 'liked' and 'decorated' (past tense) is incorrect here. Changing to 'likes' and 'decorates' correctly reflects ongoing or habitual actions.

× Well, I live in a small village, however there are several flowers because my all village people like to garden flowers in their backyard area because it feels them relaxed and happy.

✓ Well, I live in a small village; however, there are several flowers because all the people in my village like to garden flowers in their backyard area as it makes them feel relaxed and happy.

The phrase 'it feels them relaxed and happy' incorrectly uses the pronoun 'them' as the object of 'feels'. The correct structure is 'makes them feel', where 'them' is the object of 'makes' and 'feel' is the bare infinitive verb. This correction clarifies the meaning and corrects the pronoun usage.

× They prepared a bouquet of flowers, and they send their near and dear ones who they like.

✓ They prepare bouquets of flowers and send them to their near and dear ones whom they like.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'a bouquet' (singular) when referring to a general habit, so plural 'bouquets' is more appropriate. Also, 'send their near and dear ones' is incorrect; it should be 'send them to their near and dear ones'. Additionally, 'who they like' should be 'whom they like' as it is the object of the verb 'like'.

× Definitely, I like to capture pictures of flowers because I think when I take photos of flowers, I make a gallery in future of these flower sticks.

✓ Definitely, I like to capture pictures of flowers because I think when I take photos of flowers, I will make a gallery in the future of these flower sticks.

The phrase 'I make a gallery in future' is incorrect because it refers to a future event. The correct form is 'I will make a gallery in the future' using the future tense 'will make' and including the definite article 'the' before 'future'.