花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it contains a repetition error ('have have') and could be more concise. Try to avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I love flowers, especially roses and sunflowers, because they are beautiful and roses have an amazing fragrance.

建議: Your answer provides relevant information but has some repetition ('the White Rose' twice) and grammatical errors ('my girlfriend favorite flower'). Use linking words and correct grammar to improve clarity and flow.

範例: Yes, both my girlfriend and my mother love flowers. My girlfriend's favorite flower is the white rose, while my mother prefers sunflowers.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing ('Will actually know'). Try to start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain your point more naturally.

範例: Actually, I live in Shiraz, a warm and dry city, so there aren't many gardens where flowers can grow.

建議: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors ('it's garden') and could be more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid unnecessary details that do not answer the question directly.

範例: As I mentioned, Shiraz doesn't have many flowers except in gardens and parks. However, I don't usually take photos of flowers; instead, I prefer to give them as gifts to my girlfriend and mother.

建議: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors and an unclear ending ('Holy'). Try to use correct grammar and avoid unnecessary words to make your answer clearer and more natural.

範例: Yes, in my country, flowers symbolize love and romance, so people often give flowers to their partners or mothers as gifts.

× Roses and sunflowers are my favorite flowers because they are so beautiful and also roses have have some amazing smell.

✓ Roses and sunflowers are my favorite flowers because they are so beautiful and also roses have some amazing smells.

The word 'smell' should be pluralized to 'smells' because it refers to various scents that roses can have. Using the plural form is more natural when talking about multiple types or instances of smell.

× My girlfriend favorite flower is roses, the White Rose, the White Rose and my favorite flower of my mother is sunflower.

✓ My girlfriend's favorite flower is the rose, the white rose, and my mother's favorite flower is the sunflower.

Possessive forms are needed for 'girlfriend' and 'mother' to show ownership, so 'girlfriend' becomes 'girlfriend's' and 'mother' becomes 'mother's'. Also, 'roses' should be singular 'rose' when referring to a type of flower generally. The repetition of 'the White Rose' is redundant and should be removed. 'Sunflower' should be preceded by 'the' to specify the flower.

× Will actually know I live in Shiraz which is a warm and dry city in my country and because of that there is no such a garden to grow any flowers.

✓ Well, actually, I know I live in Shiraz which is a warm and dry city in my country and because of that there is no garden to grow any flowers.

The phrase 'Will actually know' is incorrect. It should be 'Well, actually, I know' to express the speaker's knowledge. 'Will' is a modal verb used for future tense and is not appropriate here.

× Shiraz is not a city with so much flowers in it, except it's garden and parks.

✓ Shiraz is not a city with so many flowers in it, except its gardens and parks.

'Much' is used with uncountable nouns, while 'many' is used with countable nouns like 'flowers'. Also, 'it's' is a contraction for 'it is' and should be 'its' to show possession. 'Garden' should be plural 'gardens' to match 'parks'.

× But I'm not the person who wants to take photos of these flowers, I just want to give them away to my girlfriend and my mother.

✓ But I'm not the person who wants to take photos of these flowers; I just want to give them to my girlfriend and my mother.

The phrase 'give them away' implies giving something for free or discarding it, which may not be the intended meaning. 'Give them to' is more appropriate when presenting flowers as gifts. Also, the comma should be replaced with a semicolon to properly connect two independent clauses.

× So people who in love with their partner or mother always give flowers as a gift to their beloved people.

✓ So people who are in love with their partner or mother always give flowers as gifts to their beloved ones.

The verb 'are' is missing after 'people who'. Also, 'as a gift' should be plural 'as gifts' to match the plural subject 'people'. 'Beloved people' is awkward; 'beloved ones' is more natural.