花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more structured and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons with linking words. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid grammatical errors.

範例: Yes, I love flowers because their fragrance helps me relax and uplifts my mood. Whenever I receive flowers from my friends or family, I feel very happy and appreciated.

建議: Focus on clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, ensure pronouns agree and sentences are complete.

範例: Yes, my younger sister loves flowers. Recently, she passed a competitive exam, so I bought her a big bouquet of red flowers to celebrate and make her happy.

建議: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and improve sentence structure.

範例: There are not many flowers where I live. However, near my workplace, there is a big flower shop, and I often pass by it during my breaks.

建議: Try to organize your answer better and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about your habits.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers I receive from friends or family. I post these pictures on social media and also press the flowers in my books to keep them as a reminder until they dry.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition and completing your sentences. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

範例: Yes, in my country, people often send flowers on occasions like birthdays, festivals, and marriages. It is a common way to express happiness and good wishes to others.

× I really like getting flowers and also expecting from others as it gives me a feel of the smell from the flowers give me a a feel of relaxation and it has also uplift my mood.

✓ I really like getting flowers and also expecting them from others as the smell of the flowers gives me a feel of relaxation and it has also uplifted my mood.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'expecting' without an object and has verb form errors. 'Expecting' should be followed by an object ('them'). Also, 'gives' should agree with singular 'smell', and 'has uplift' should be 'has uplifted' (past participle) to indicate completed action. Correct verb forms and object usage improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× So whenever I receive from flowers from my friends or family I feel very enjoyable and.

✓ So whenever I receive flowers from my friends or family, I feel very happy.

The phrase 'feel very enjoyable' is incorrect because 'enjoyable' describes something that causes enjoyment, not a feeling. The correct adjective to describe a feeling is 'happy'. Also, the sentence was incomplete and had an extra preposition 'from'. Removing 'from' and completing the sentence improves clarity and correctness.

× My my younger sister is very much gravitated towards flower so whenever I feel recently he has passed one of the competitive exam.

✓ My younger sister is very much gravitated towards flowers, and recently she has passed one of the competitive exams.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect when referring to 'my younger sister'; it should be 'she'. Also, 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match the context. Correct pronoun usage and plural form ensure grammatical agreement and clarity.

× So I have bought a big bouquet with all the red flowers to make her happy fill her flowers.

✓ So I bought a big bouquet with all red flowers to make her happy and fill her with joy.

The phrase 'fill her flowers' is incorrect and unclear. It likely intends to express 'fill her with happiness' or 'joy'. Also, 'have bought' can be simplified to 'bought' for past action. Correcting the phrase and verb tense improves meaning and grammatical accuracy.

× The place I live there are not much flowers but whenever the way the place I work is surrounded by beside the my workplace there is a big booking shop and I whenever I pass by here I pass.

✓ The place where I live does not have many flowers, but the place where I work is surrounded by them. Beside my workplace, there is a big booking shop, and whenever I pass by here, I pass.

'Not much flowers' is incorrect; 'flowers' is countable plural, so 'many flowers' is correct. Also, sentence structure is confusing and needs rephrasing for clarity. Correct use of quantifiers and sentence restructuring improve grammatical correctness and comprehension.

× Absolutely yes whenever I receive flowers from my friends our family I usually take picture and post it on social media as and also I keep the flowers in my books as a reminder and I I never till it become dry I keep it in.

✓ Absolutely yes, whenever I receive flowers from my friends or family, I usually take pictures and post them on social media. I also keep the flowers in my books as a reminder and never throw them away until they become dry.

The original sentence has incorrect prepositions ('our' instead of 'or'), missing articles ('take picture' should be 'take pictures'), and incomplete phrases. Correct prepositions, plural forms, and sentence completion improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, in my country people usually send flowers in every occasions like birthday, festivals, marriages.

✓ Yes, in my country, people usually send flowers on every occasion like birthdays, festivals, and marriages.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'every occasions'; it should be 'on every occasion'. Also, 'occasions' should be singular 'occasion' when preceded by 'every'. Plural forms of 'birthday' and inclusion of commas improve grammatical correctness.