花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to use more natural and grammatically correct sentences. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure by using linking words. For example, instead of 'Rose flower is my favorite flower', say 'My favourite flower is the rose because of its deep red colour.' Also, correct grammar mistakes like 'it have' to 'it has' and use smoother transitions.

範例: Yes, I love flowers. My favourite flower is the rose because of its deep red colour. Although its stem has thorns, if we cut it carefully, we can enjoy its beautiful appearance.

建議: Focus on correct verb forms and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'She like flowers a lot and she like to do pooja with that flowers', say 'She likes flowers a lot and often uses them during pooja. She believes that praying to God with flowers can help fulfil our desires.'

範例: My sister loves flowers very much. She often uses them during pooja because she believes that praying to God with flowers can help fulfil our desires.

建議: Improve vocabulary accuracy and sentence clarity. Use linking words to make the answer coherent. For example, instead of 'Flowers like rose, Lily, porous Oracle, different kind of flowers there', say 'There are various flowers such as roses, lilies, and other kinds in the garden.' Also, correct 'porous Oracle' which seems incorrect or unclear.

範例: Yes, there is a garden near my home that has many plants with various kinds of flowers. For instance, roses, lilies, and several other types bloom there.

建議: Use correct tenses and smoother linking words. For example, instead of 'when I will get a free tab', say 'when I get some free time'. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers on my way to the office. There is a garden and a nursery nearby, so whenever I get some free time, I stop to capture pictures of the beautiful flowers.

建議: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, instead of 'Very rarely only few people will prefer to send flowers to others in their birthdays, anniversary and birthday', say 'Only a few people send flowers on occasions like birthdays and anniversaries. Some believe it is a waste of time because flowers eventually wilt.'

範例: In my country, only a few people send flowers on special occasions such as birthdays and anniversaries. Many think it is a waste of time since flowers eventually wilt.

× Rose flower is my favorite flower.

✓ Rose flowers are my favorite flowers.

The phrase 'Rose flower' should be pluralized to 'Rose flowers' to correctly refer to the type of flowers in general. Also, 'flower' at the end should be plural 'flowers' to match the plural subject. This is a singular and plural issue.

× although it have some spikes in that stem.

✓ although it has some spikes on that stem.

The pronoun 'it' refers to a singular noun, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'on' when referring to spikes on a stem. This is a singular and plural issue combined with preposition usage.

× But if we will cut it with very carefully we can get a beautiful flower.

✓ But if we cut it very carefully, we can get a beautiful flower.

In conditional sentences, 'if' clauses use the present tense, not 'will'. So 'if we will cut' should be 'if we cut'. Also, 'with very carefully' is incorrect; 'very carefully' alone is sufficient. This is a modal verb usage issue.

× She like flowers a lot and she like to do pooja with that flowers.

✓ She likes flowers a lot and she likes to do pooja with those flowers.

The verb 'like' should be 'likes' to agree with the third person singular subject 'She'. Also, 'that flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'those flowers' for plural demonstrative pronoun. This is a singular and plural issue and pronoun usage issue.

× She believes that if you will pray to God with flowers, our desires will gonna fulfill by the God.

✓ She believes that if you pray to God with flowers, our desires will be fulfilled by God.

In conditional sentences, 'if' clauses use present tense, so 'if you will pray' should be 'if you pray'. 'Will gonna' is incorrect; 'gonna' is informal and redundant with 'will'. The correct passive form is 'will be fulfilled'. Also, 'the God' should be 'God' without 'the'. This is a modal verb usage and article usage issue.

× Yes, there is a garden nearby my home.

✓ Yes, there is a garden near my home.

The phrase 'nearby my home' is incorrect; 'near my home' is the correct prepositional phrase. This is a 'there be' issue combined with preposition usage.

× It has a lot of plants with various kinds of flowers.

✓ It has a lot of plants with various kinds of flowers.

This sentence is correct and does not contain a grammar mistake from the list.

× Flowers like rose, Lily, porous Oracle, different kind of flowers there.

✓ There are flowers like rose, lily, porous oracle, and different kinds of flowers.

The sentence structure is incorrect and missing the verb 'are'. Also, 'different kind of flowers' should be 'different kinds of flowers' to agree in plural. Capitalization of 'Lily' and 'porous Oracle' should be lowercase unless proper nouns. This is a sentence structure and singular/plural issue.

× Yes, I take photos of various flowers while I'm going to my office.

✓ Yes, I take photos of various flowers while I go to my office.

The phrase 'while I'm going' is present continuous, which is acceptable, but 'while I go' is more natural for habitual actions. This is a present tense issue.

× So when I will get a free tab, I will stop in between on my way and take pictures of beautiful flowers.

✓ So when I get a free moment, I will stop on my way and take pictures of beautiful flowers.

In 'when' clauses referring to the future, we use present tense, not 'will'. Also, 'free tab' is unclear; 'free moment' is more appropriate. 'Stop in between on my way' is awkward; 'stop on my way' is better. This is a future tense and sentence structure issue.

× Very rarely only few people will prefer to send flowers to others in their birthdays, anniversary and birthday.

✓ Very rarely, only a few people prefer to send flowers to others on their birthdays and anniversaries.

'Only few people' should be 'only a few people'. 'Will prefer' is unnecessary future tense; present tense 'prefer' is better for habitual action. 'In their birthdays, anniversary and birthday' should be 'on their birthdays and anniversaries'. This is a quantifier, modal verb usage, and preposition usage issue.

× Some people believe that sending a flowers is like waste of time because after some time the flowers will be dried down anyhow.

✓ Some people believe that sending flowers is a waste of time because after some time the flowers will dry up anyway.

'Sending a flowers' is incorrect; 'flowers' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'Like waste of time' should be 'a waste of time'. 'Will be dried down' is passive and awkward; 'will dry up' is better. 'Anyhow' is informal; 'anyway' is preferred. This is a singular/plural, article, and verb tense issue.