花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇。

範例: Yes, I love flowers, especially Jasmine. My mother shares the same taste and often plants Jasmine in our small front yard, which is perfect for them to grow.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且用词不准确。建议使用更自然的表达，避免重复，并且注意语法正确。

範例: Yes, my mother loves flowers very much. She feels energetic whenever she smells Jasmine, which is why she plants many around our house.

建議: 回答中语法和表达不够自然，句子结构复杂且有重复。建议简化句子，使用更准确的词汇，并注意时态和搭配。

範例: When we first moved here, there weren't many flowers. However, thanks to my mother's efforts, more flowers have grown, and their scent always makes me feel refreshed.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，且用词不当。建议使用更准确的表达，避免重复，并注意词汇搭配。

範例: No, I don't usually take photos of flowers. I prefer to experience them directly by touching and smelling Jasmine, which I find very enjoyable.

建議: 回答中有语法和表达不准确的问题，部分句子不够流畅。建议使用更自然的表达，注意词汇搭配和句子结构。

範例: Yes, sending flowers is a traditional custom in my country during festivals. I often send flowers to my mother to show my gratitude because she is very important to me.

× She usually plays some beautiful Jasmine around around our house.

✓ She usually plants some beautiful Jasmine around our house.

这里动词 'plays' 用错了，应该用 'plants' 表示种植花。'play' 意为玩耍，不符合语境。

× She usually plays some beautiful Jasmine around around our house.

✓ She usually plants some beautiful Jasmines around our house.

'Jasmine' 是可数名词，表示茉莉花，复数形式应为 'Jasmines'，表示多株茉莉花。

× We have a we have a small yard in in front of our house that is the ideal place for her to plant this flower.

✓ We have a small yard in front of our house that is the ideal place for her to plant these flowers.

前文提到多株茉莉花，'this flower' 应改为复数 'these flowers'，与前文保持一致。

× As I told before, this person must be my mother.

✓ As I told you before, this person must be my mother.

'As I told before' 缺少宾语，应该是 'As I told you before'，明确告诉对方。

× She is a big fan of just me and every time she smells the scent of Jasmine, she will feel vigorous and energetic.

✓ She is a big fan of jasmine and every time she smells the scent of jasmine, she feels vigorous and energetic.

'just me' 用错，应该是 'jasmine'。另外，习惯用一般现在时描述习惯动作，'will feel' 改为 'feels'。

× I think that this is the main reason why she would like to plan some Jasmine around our house.

✓ I think that this is the main reason why she would like to plant some jasmine around our house.

动词 'plan' 用错，应该是 'plant'，表示种植。

× They did not have plenty of flowers when we arrived this place, but with my mom's effort, there are more and more flowers surviving in this place.

✓ There were not plenty of flowers when we arrived at this place, but with my mom's effort, there are more and more flowers surviving here.

'They did not have' 主语错误，应使用 'There were not' 表示存在。'arrived this place' 缺少介词 'at'。

× Every time I get out of my duty, I will feel very vigorous when I smell the scent of these flowers.

✓ Every time I get off my duty, I feel very vigorous when I smell the scent of these flowers.

短语 'get out of my duty' 用错，正确表达是 'get off my duty'，表示下班。

× No, I'm not a person who like to take photos of something.

✓ No, I'm not a person who likes to take photos of things.

主语是 'who' 指代单数，动词应加第三人称单数 'likes'。'something' 改为复数 'things' 更符合习惯表达。

× I'm a person who likes to feel the real items or stuff.

✓ I'm a person who likes to feel real items or stuff.

'the real items' 中 'the' 不必要，去掉更自然。

× I prefer to touch the Jasmine and taste the smell of this Jasmine.

✓ I prefer to touch the jasmine and smell this jasmine.

'taste the smell' 用法错误，应该直接用 'smell' 表示闻。

× Yes, it has been a traditional custom in my country.

✓ Yes, it is a traditional custom in my country.

习惯用一般现在时描述传统习俗，'has been' 改为 'is'。

× People will send various kinds of flowers in different festivals.

✓ People will send various kinds of flowers on different festivals.

表示节日时用介词 'on'，不是 'in'。

× As for me, I like to send connection to my mom in order to express my gratitude to her.

✓ As for me, I like to send flowers to my mom in order to express my gratitude to her.

'send connection' 用词错误，应为 'send flowers'，符合上下文。

× She is the most important person, so I think this behavior is really worth to do it.

✓ She is the most important person, so I think this behavior is really worth doing.

'worth to do it' 结构错误，正确用法是 'worth doing'。