花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to answer the question directly and clearly. Avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases like "Give her right back." Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. For example, explain why you love flowers and mention your favorite types with reasons.

範例: Yes, I love flowers very much. When I was a child, I used to plant flowers because they made me happy. Now, I especially like roses and silver flowers because they look very beautiful and smell nice.

建議: Your answer is good but could be improved by adding linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to add a personal opinion or feeling to make it more engaging.

範例: Yes, my grandma absolutely loves flowers. In fact, she has a beautiful garden where she grows roses, sunflowers, and dahlias. She enjoys spending time every day watering and caring for them because it relaxes her.

建議: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Answer the question directly with a topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid vague words like "suddenly" and explain the situation clearly.

範例: No, there are not many flowers where I live. Instead, there are mostly trees, but even they are few. Therefore, the area looks quite green but not colorful.

建議: Try to organize your answer more clearly and avoid filler words like "uh." Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about why you like taking photos of flowers.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers. In fact, I have many flower pictures in my gallery. Moreover, I like to share and explore flower photos on Instagram because they look beautiful and calm.

建議: Your answer is clear but can be improved by combining sentences with linking words for better flow. Also, add a brief explanation or example to enrich your response.

範例: People in my country usually send flowers only on special occasions. For example, they give flowers during anniversaries or birthdays to show their love and appreciation.

× Give her right back.

✓ I gave her right back.

The sentence 'Give her right back.' is incomplete and unclear in this context. It lacks a subject and does not fit the question about loving flowers. The student likely intended to say something about their past actions, so correcting it to 'I gave her right back.' or better yet, removing it to maintain relevance would improve clarity.

× I used to plant some flowers 'cause they are my favorite type of flower

✓ I used to plant some flowers because they are my favorite type of flower

The phrase 'some flowers' is plural, but 'my favorite type of flower' is singular. This is acceptable if referring to a single type of flower. However, the sentence is acceptable as is; the only issue is the informal contraction 'cause' which should be 'because' for formal correctness.

× I prefer rose silver flowers because they are very beautiful.

✓ I prefer rose silver flowers because they are very beautiful.

The phrase 'rose silver flowers' is unclear and may be a misordering or incorrect adjective use. Possibly the student meant 'silver rose flowers' or 'roses with silver color'. Clarifying the adjective order would improve the sentence. However, grammatically, the sentence is correct.

× Suddenly there are no flowers and when I leave we just have trees and there are not many of them.

✓ Currently, there are no flowers, and when I leave, we just have trees, and there are not many of them.

The adverb 'Suddenly' is incorrectly used to describe a current state. 'Suddenly' implies an unexpected change, which does not fit here. Replacing it with 'Currently' or 'At the moment' is more appropriate. Also, adding commas improves sentence clarity.

× Yes I do in my gallery I have a lot of flowers for us and I like to explore it, uh, on Instagram because they are really steady and good looking.

✓ Yes, I do. In my gallery, I have a lot of flowers, and I like to explore them on Instagram because they are really steady and good looking.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used to refer to 'flowers', which is plural. It should be 'them'. Also, the sentence lacks commas for clarity and has informal fillers like 'uh' which should be omitted in formal speech.

× Only when it's some special occasion.

✓ Only when it's a special occasion.

The phrase 'some special occasion' is informal and slightly incorrect. Using 'a special occasion' is more appropriate. Also, the sentence is a fragment; it should be connected to the previous sentence or completed for clarity.