花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and be specific about the colors you like. For example, instead of saying "all of the colors that Tulip as and I owe," you can say "I love the variety of colors tulips come in, such as red, yellow, and pink."

範例: Yes, I love flowers, especially tulips. I like them because they are simple yet elegant, and they come in many beautiful colors like red, yellow, and pink. Their perfect shape always fascinates me.

建議: Improve your answer by making it more coherent and complete. Use linking words to connect your sentences and clarify your points. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases like "Anbia Rose" and "It is her way of showing someone."

範例: Yes, I have a friend named Julia who loves flowers very much. Whenever we pass by a flower garden or store, she always stops to admire the flowers. For her, giving flowers is a way to show care and affection to others.

建議: Make your answer more natural by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be specific about the types of flowers or conditions that help them grow.

範例: I live in Bukidnon, where there are many flowers because the weather is humid and the soil is fertile. These conditions help flowers grow healthy and vibrant.

建議: Try to make your answer more concise and natural. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid awkward phrases like "It screams beauty." Also, correct grammar mistakes such as "photos off the flowers" to "photos of flowers."

範例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers I see because I find them beautiful and calming. Looking at these pictures later helps me feel relaxed and happy.

建議: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your points logically. For example, instead of "I often got sold out," say "My flowers often sell out." Also, clarify the reason why people send flowers.

範例: I started a flower-selling business, and my flowers often sell out because many people in my country order flowers, especially on Valentine's Day. Sending flowers is a popular way to express love to their partners.

× My favorite flower is tulips, aside from it comes in a different color.

✓ My favorite flowers are tulips, aside from the fact that they come in different colors.

The subject 'flower' is singular but refers to 'tulips' which is plural, so it should be plural 'flowers'. Also, 'it' should be 'they' to agree with plural 'tulips'. The phrase 'aside from it comes' is incorrect; it should be 'aside from the fact that they come'. This correction ensures subject-verb agreement and proper plural usage.

× I love its colors, all of the colors that Tulip as and I owe.

✓ I love its colors, all of the colors that tulips have and I adore.

The word 'Tulip' should be plural 'tulips' to match the context. 'as' is incorrect and should be 'have' to indicate possession. 'I owe' is incorrect in this context; 'I adore' or 'I love' fits better. This correction fixes plural form and verb usage.

× Her name is Julia so when we. Passed by a flower garden or flower store.

✓ Her name is Julia, so when we pass by a flower garden or flower store,

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly punctuated. 'Passed' should be present tense 'pass' to match the habitual action. The period after 'we' breaks the sentence incorrectly. This correction fixes sentence structure and tense.

× She always stops in the flower store.

✓ She always stops at the flower store.

The correct preposition to indicate stopping at a place is 'at' rather than 'in'. 'In' implies being inside, but 'stop at' is the correct phrase for pausing at a location.

× Anbia Rose.

✓ Anbia Rose.

This appears to be a proper noun or name and does not contain a grammatical error. No correction needed.

× She really likes flowers. It is her way of showing someone.

✓ She really likes flowers. It is her way of showing affection to someone.

The phrase 'showing someone' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'affection to' clarifies the meaning. This correction improves sentence clarity and completeness.

× and a flowers grow healthy in our soils.

✓ and flowers grow healthily in our soil.

'a flowers' is incorrect; 'flowers' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'healthy' is an adjective but should be the adverb 'healthily' to describe the verb 'grow'. 'soils' should be singular 'soil' when referring to the general ground in the area. This correction fixes article usage, adverb form, and noun number.

× Yes, I do take photos off the flowers that I passed by

✓ Yes, I do take photos of the flowers that I pass by

The preposition 'off' is incorrect; it should be 'of' to indicate the object of the photos. 'passed' should be present tense 'pass' to indicate habitual action. This correction fixes preposition and tense.

× I passed by and this is because I really like the flowers.

✓ I pass by and this is because I really like the flowers.

The verb 'passed' is past tense but the context suggests habitual action, so present tense 'pass' is appropriate. This correction aligns verb tense with context.

× It screams beauty and I like looking at it and it's very therapeutic to look at the flowers.

✓ They scream beauty and I like looking at them and it's very therapeutic to look at the flowers.

'It' refers to 'flowers' which is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they' and 'them' accordingly. This correction fixes pronoun agreement.

× Therefore I love taking pictures of them so I can look at later.

✓ Therefore, I love taking pictures of them so I can look at them later.

The sentence is missing the pronoun 'them' after 'look at' to complete the phrase. Adding a comma after 'Therefore' improves readability. This correction fixes sentence completeness and punctuation.

× I actually started a business of selling flowers and. I often got sold out because a lot of people in my country orders flowers especially in Valentine's Day

✓ I actually started a business selling flowers and I often sell out because a lot of people in my country order flowers especially on Valentine's Day

'got sold out' is awkward; 'sell out' is the correct phrase. 'orders' should be 'order' to agree with plural subject 'people'. 'in Valentine's Day' should be 'on Valentine's Day' for correct preposition. This correction fixes verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and preposition.

× especially in Valentine's Day because this is the other way on showing their partners love.

✓ especially on Valentine's Day because this is another way of showing their partner's love.

The preposition 'in' should be 'on' for days. 'the other way on' is incorrect; 'another way of' is correct. 'partners' should be possessive 'partner's' to indicate love belonging to the partner. This correction fixes prepositions and possessive form.