花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议注意句子结构，避免断句错误，并使用更准确的词汇表达情感。

範例: Yes, I love flowers because they bring a sense of beauty and help me feel relaxed when I am stressed from work or personal tasks.

建議: 回答内容混乱且语法错误较多，建议理清句子结构，明确表达人物和行为，避免拼写错误。

範例: Yes, my neighbor, who is a teacher, loves planting flowers on her balcony. She often shares her plants with neighbors and teaches local children some basic gardening skills in their spare time.

建議: 回答中句子断裂，表达不连贯，建议使用连词连接句子，使表达更流畅，同时注意语法和词汇的准确性。

範例: Yes, there are many kinds of flowers in our community, such as roses and jasmine. All these flowers look very beautiful and give us a sense of tranquility, making our lives more colorful and pleasant.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，明确表达拍照的习惯和分享对象。

範例: Absolutely, I often take photos of beautiful scenes around me, such as flowers on the street. I usually share these photos with my family and friends to share the beauty.

建議: 回答内容混乱且语法错误严重，建议理清思路，使用完整句子表达花的象征意义和送花的场合。

範例: Yes, in my country, people often send flowers as a symbol of love and gratitude on occasions like weddings and anniversaries. It is a good way to express their feelings to loved ones.

× Which can makes me feel relaxed when I stressed the with my work and personal assignments.

✓ Which can make me feel relaxed when I am stressed with my work and personal assignments.

动词make后面接动词原形，不能加s。句中makes应改为make。并且stressed前应加be动词，表示状态。

× For some people, they send flowers to show their love and gratitude to real after warms.

✓ For some people, they send flowers to show their love and gratitude to real loved ones.

real after warms是错误表达，应为real loved ones，表示真正的亲人。

× Yes, my neighbor Mr. Chair or entire teacher loves planting flowers in her balcony and she always share his robbers with neighbors and teach local children's too.

✓ Yes, my neighbor Mr. Chair or entire teacher loves planting flowers on her balcony and she always shares her flowers with neighbors and teaches local children too.

her balcony前介词应为on；share后主语是she，动词应加s；his robbers应为her flowers；children's应为children，复数形式。

× Yes, my neighbor Mr. Chair or entire teacher loves planting flowers in her balcony and she always share his robbers with neighbors and teach local children's too.

✓ Yes, my neighbor Mr. Chair or entire teacher loves planting flowers on her balcony and she always shares her flowers with neighbors and teaches local children too.

种花应用介词on表示在阳台上，而不是in。

× Is exercise some basic plant skills in their spare time?

✓ They exercise some basic plant skills in their spare time.

句子缺少主语，且is exercise结构错误，应改为They exercise，表示他们锻炼。

× Yes, there are many sorts of flowers in our community, such as roses just means.

✓ Yes, there are many sorts of flowers in our community, such as roses and jasmines.

just means无意义，应为jasmines，表示茉莉花，复数形式。

× And so all these flowers looks very beautiful.

✓ And so all these flowers look very beautiful.

flowers为复数，谓语动词look应为复数形式，不加s。

× And give us a sense of tranquility.

✓ They give us a sense of tranquility.

句子缺少主语，应加主语they，指代前文的flowers。

× Which makes our life more colorful.

✓ This makes our life more colorful.

which引导的定语从句不能单独成句，应改为this引导主句。

× And beautiful.

✓ And beautiful.

该句为不完整句，缺少谓语，建议与前句合并或补充谓语。

× Absolutely, I will be in touch in capturing the beautiful sceneries around me such as the flowers in the street.

✓ Absolutely, I will be capturing the beautiful sceneries around me such as the flowers in the street.

be in touch in capturing表达不正确，应改为will be capturing，表示将来进行时。

× I usually take photos for the Anne shared with my loved ones such as my family member and I my friends to share the beauty.

✓ I usually take photos and share them with my loved ones such as my family members and my friends to share the beauty.

句子结构混乱，for the Anne无意义，应改为and share them；family member应为复数family members；I my friends应为my friends。

× He asked, sending flowers Asus symbol of.

✓ Yes, sending flowers as a symbol of

He asked无意义，应为Yes；Asus应为as a；句子不完整需补充。

× Expressing our love and gratitude to others in some occasions such as weddings, anniversary's and so on is a good way for us to express our heart for things to my loved ones.

✓ Expressing our love and gratitude to others on some occasions such as weddings, anniversaries and so on is a good way for us to express our feelings to my loved ones.

in some occasions应为on some occasions；anniversary's错误，应为复数anniversaries；express our heart for things表达不当，应为express our feelings。