花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more coherent and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and check for grammatical accuracy. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas unnecessarily.

範例: Yes, I love flowers, especially roses. I usually buy a bunch every week to brighten up my room because their vibrant colours always cheer me up.

建議: Focus on clarity and grammatical accuracy. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to make your answer more logical and provide specific details to support your points.

範例: Yes, my mother loves flowers and I believe I inherited this passion from her. She often buys flowers to decorate our house because she believes that a colourful environment makes life more joyful.

建議: Try to improve sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly. Be specific about the differences and avoid repetition.

範例: I currently live in Perth, Australia, where the flora is quite different from Vietnam. In Vietnam, a tropical country, many flowers bloom all year round, which makes the scenery very colourful and uplifting.

建議: Work on pronunciation and word choice to avoid confusion (e.g., 'hobby' not 'Hobbit', 'Perth' not 'part'). Also, keep sentences clear and concise, and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

範例: Taking photos of flowers is one of my favourite hobbies. As a student at university in Perth, I enjoy capturing the beautiful flowers around the campus whenever I go for a walk.

建議: Focus on grammatical accuracy and clarity. Avoid confusing phrases and use linking words to organise your ideas. Provide specific cultural examples to enrich your answer.

範例: Yes, in Vietnam, people often give flowers, especially in romantic relationships. For example, boyfriends usually give flowers to their girlfriends. However, flowers are also commonly exchanged among friends and family because they are affordable and meaningful.

× I do, I love them and I have my favorite one that is the roses.

✓ I do, I love them and I have my favorite ones that are the roses.

The word 'roses' is plural, so the phrase 'my favorite one' should be pluralized to 'my favorite ones' and 'is' should be changed to 'are' to agree in number with the plural noun.

× I usually buy bunches of roses every week just to cheer me up and put in in the corner of my room.

✓ I usually buy bunches of roses every week just to cheer me up and put them in the corner of my room.

The pronoun 'them' is needed to refer to 'roses' as the object of the verb 'put'. Also, 'in in' is a repetition error; it should be 'in' only.

× Every with all of the color in the market and currently I'm trying to.

✓ Every week, with all of the colors in the market, I am currently trying to buy some.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. Adding 'week' clarifies the time frame, and completing the sentence with a clear verb phrase improves structure and meaning.

× I think my love for flower is is inherited from my mom.

✓ I think my love for flowers is inherited from my mom.

The noun 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' to correctly express a general love for flowers.

× Ann usually buys a lot of flour to for decoration in our house.

✓ Ann usually buys a lot of flowers for decoration in our house.

The word 'flour' (used in baking) is incorrect here; it should be 'flowers' to match the context of decoration.

× She told I remembered when I was a kid, she told me that is very important for us to decorate our room as well our life would have.

✓ I remember when I was a kid, she told me that it is very important for us to decorate our room as well as our life.

The original sentence is fragmented and confusing. Reordering and adding missing words like 'it' and 'as well as' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Currently I'm leaving in Perth in Australia.

✓ Currently I'm living in Perth, Australia.

The verb 'leaving' is incorrect here; it should be 'living' to indicate residence. Also, 'in Perth in Australia' is better expressed as 'in Perth, Australia'.

× From the flora here's is quite different from the one in Vietnam, which is a tropical country.

✓ The flora here is quite different from that in Vietnam, which is a tropical country.

'Flora here's' is incorrect; it should be 'flora here'. Also, 'the one' should be 'that' to refer to flora in Vietnam.

× I would say in Vietnam there were there, there are so many kinds of flowers which blooms or year round that makes me feel like so happy and make the scenery so colorful.

✓ I would say in Vietnam there are so many kinds of flowers which bloom year round, which makes me feel very happy and makes the scenery so colourful.

'Blooms' should be 'bloom' to agree with plural 'flowers'. 'Were there, there are' is redundant and confusing; 'there are' suffices. 'So happy' should be 'very happy' for natural expression. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular 'which' referring to the whole clause.

× That's one of my favorite Hobbit.

✓ That's one of my favorite hobbies.

The word 'Hobbit' is incorrect; it should be 'hobby' to refer to an activity one enjoys.

× As I have mentioned, I am currently in part as a student.

✓ As I have mentioned, I am currently in Perth as a student.

'In part' is a typo or mishearing; it should be 'in Perth', the city name.

× I cut a university and what makes me very impressive about the school campus is that we have a lot of fraud flowers around the campus and I love taking photo whenever I'm walking for leisure around the campus.

✓ I attend a university and what impresses me about the school campus is that we have a lot of fresh flowers around the campus and I love taking photos whenever I'm walking for leisure around the campus.

'Cut a university' is incorrect; it should be 'attend a university'. 'Makes me very impressive' should be 'impresses me'. 'Fraud flowers' is incorrect; likely meant 'fresh flowers'. 'Taking photo' should be plural 'taking photos'.

× The boyfriend are always expected to give flowers to their girlfriends.

✓ Boyfriends are always expected to give flowers to their girlfriends.

'The boyfriend are' is incorrect; 'boyfriends are' is correct to match plural subject and verb agreement.

× Magically the girlfriend can do with actually everyone can give other would flowers.

✓ Actually, girlfriends can do without it; actually, everyone can give others flowers.

The original sentence is unclear and contains pronoun errors. 'Girlfriend can do with' should be 'girlfriends can do without it'. 'Give other would flowers' should be 'give others flowers'.

× Everyone left flower though and it's cheap in Vietnam too, so why not?

✓ Everyone loves flowers though and they're cheap in Vietnam too, so why not?

'Left flower' is incorrect; likely meant 'loves flowers'. 'It's' should be 'they're' to agree with plural 'flowers'.