名字— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and directly state the meaning or origin first. Avoid repetition ("that that") and unnecessary background unless it adds value. Use one clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting details with a linking phrase. Pronunciation and grammar need minor correction.

範例: My name is Frederick Bryan, and it was suggested by my cousin before I was born. I like it because people say "Bryan Frederick" sounds classy and upper-class, which makes me proud of the name.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your naming principle, then give a specific example and briefly explain the personal connection. Avoid vague lines like "I have experienced a lot." Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas.

範例: I would choose names that reflect important positive experiences in my life. For example, I would name my daughter Jasmine because the flower symbolizes a blessing, and she would remind me of a time when I felt especially grateful.

建議: Answer directly and avoid hesitations and repetitions ("we we"). Use one clear sentence to answer, then add one supporting detail about naming conventions if relevant. Check grammar: say "the same name as me" rather than "as I am."

範例: No, nobody in my family has the same full name as me; we all have different given names but share the same surname. This is common in my family, so only the family name is shared.

建議: Be more precise and avoid filler words ("umm," "uh"). Use a clear contrast phrase ("In the past... Now...") and give specific examples and reasons (western influence, globalization). Use correct verbs ("choose" instead of "narrate").

範例: In the past, Chinese names often used traditional characters with deep meanings, but now many parents choose Western-style names. For example, names like Joshua or Amanda are becoming more common because of international travel and media influence.

建議: Correct factual errors (Kim is Korean; Lee/Li is Chinese). Give a direct answer and support it with accurate examples or reasons. Avoid trailing off. Use linking words and finish the sentence. Keep it concise.

範例: Yes, some surnames like Li (often spelled Lee) and Wang are very common in China because they originate from large historical clans. I often notice these names in films and news.

× I will choose names that are related to what has happened to me in the past, which are good experiences.

✓ I will choose names that are related to good experiences I have had in the past.

The original sentence uses a complex relative clause 'that are related to what has happened to me in the past, which are good experiences' that is awkward and unclear. Reordering to 'related to good experiences I have had in the past' makes the pronoun reference clear and avoids a dangling 'which'. Use of 'have had' (present perfect) correctly links past experiences to the present decision.

× No, I actually don't have a family member that has the same name as I am.

✓ No, I actually don't have a family member who has the same name as I do.

Use 'who' for people instead of 'that', and the clause 'same name as I am' is unidiomatic. Use 'same name as I do' or 'the same name as me'. This corrects pronoun choice and grammatical structure.

× We're all different, but we we all have the same surname.

✓ We're all different, but we all have the same surname.

There is a repeated word 'we' that is a simple slip. Removing the duplicate fixes the sentence structure and flow.

× But first name and second name? No, only the surname.

✓ As for first names and middle names, no, only the surname is the same.

The original fragment 'But first name and second name?' is unclear and incomplete. Rewriting it as a full sentence clarifies meaning and corrects sentence structure. Also 'second name' is uncommon—'middle name' or 'given name' is clearer.

× I think Chinese used to have complicated names, but now that China is being westernized, umm I think they are starting to narrate to name their children, uh, names like Joshua, George, Amanda, Amber.

✓ I think Chinese used to give their children complicated names, but now that China is becoming westernized, I think people are starting to choose names like Joshua, George, Amanda and Amber.

Several issues: 'used to have complicated names' is unclear—people 'give' or 'use' names. 'China is being westernized' is passive and slightly awkward; 'becoming westernized' is more natural. 'Starting to narrate to name' is incorrect collocation; use 'starting to choose' or 'start naming their children' instead. Removing filler words (umm, uh) improves clarity.

× A lot of Chinese people have the name Lee and also Kim, so those are the common Chinese names that I hear whenever I meet Chinese people and whenever I watch a movie on Netflix, I always.

✓ A lot of Chinese people have the surname Li or Kim, so those are common names I often hear when I meet Chinese people or watch movies on Netflix.

The original sentence is incomplete ('I always.'), and 'the name Lee and also Kim' mixes given name and surname forms; 'Li' is a common romanization. Rewriting to 'surname Li or Kim' clarifies meaning. Combining clauses and removing the trailing fragment completes the sentence and improves flow.