家乡— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear and concise response with correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid redundancy and incomplete phrases. For example, specify the location clearly and mention notable features with correct terms.

範例: My hometown is Luoyang, located in central China. It is famous for its rich history and many museums, which attract numerous visitors.

建議: Your answer has several vocabulary and grammar mistakes, and the meaning is unclear. Use accurate vocabulary and correct verb forms. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific examples.

範例: I like the historical sites in my hometown, such as the Longmen Grottoes. They attract many visitors because they showcase our rich culture and help foreigners learn about Chinese history.

建議: Your answer is a bit confusing and contains incomplete sentences. Try to answer directly and clearly, avoiding hesitation sounds. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

範例: I lived in my hometown for 18 years until I graduated from high school. After that, I moved to the south of China, but I still cherish many memories of my hometown.

建議: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and repetitive phrases. Use correct verb tenses and avoid repeating the same words unnecessarily. Also, try to use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Not really. Although my hometown is developed, it does not offer many job opportunities for young people. Therefore, many prefer to move to bigger cities to build their careers and save money.

× My hometown is Luoyang which is located in the central of China, which has a lot of historical size and such as museum and.

✓ My hometown is Luoyang, which is located in the centre of China, and has a lot of historical sites such as museums.

The phrase 'in the central of China' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in the centre of China'. Also, 'historical size' is a mistake; it should be 'historical sites'. The phrase 'such as museum and' is incomplete and should be 'such as museums'. Proper use of prepositions and plural forms is necessary for clarity.

× I like my hometown's historical size, such as Luoyang Longman Gooters.

✓ I like my hometown's historical sites, such as Luoyang Longmen Grottoes.

The word 'size' is incorrect here; it should be 'sites' to refer to places of historical interest. Also, the proper noun is 'Longmen Grottoes', not 'Longman Gooters'. Using correct quantifiers and proper nouns is important for accuracy.

× It's attract lots of people to come here.

✓ It attracts lots of people to come here.

The verb 'attract' needs to be in the third person singular form 'attracts' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. Subject-verb agreement is essential for grammatical correctness.

× It not only show our rich culture but also, uh, attract a lot of foreigners to know about Chinese culture.

✓ It not only shows our rich culture but also attracts a lot of foreigners who want to learn about Chinese culture.

The verbs 'show' and 'attract' need to be in third person singular form 'shows' and 'attracts' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. Also, 'to know about' is better expressed as 'who want to learn about' for clarity and correctness.

× I've been living there for 18 years, ever since I graduated from high school.

✓ I've been living there for 18 years, ever since I graduated from high school.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I moved to the South of China, Umm, I really cherish the memory of my hometown it.

✓ I moved to the south of China. I really cherish the memories of my hometown.

The original sentence is a run-on and ends awkwardly with 'it'. Splitting into two sentences improves clarity. Also, 'memory' should be plural 'memories' to reflect multiple recollections.

× My hometown is a developed city. It didn't offer many job opportunities for the young people, so it's difficult for the young people to save money or build a career.

✓ My hometown is a developed city. It doesn't offer many job opportunities for young people, so it's difficult for them to save money or build a career.

The verb 'didn't offer' is incorrect because the context is present; it should be 'doesn't offer'. Also, 'the young people' is better as 'young people' or 'them' to avoid repetition.

× A lot of young people prefer to the big cities.

✓ A lot of young people prefer the big cities.

The preposition 'to' is unnecessary after 'prefer'. The correct structure is 'prefer the big cities'. Removing the preposition corrects the sentence.