家乡— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Instead of saying "Down," specify the location clearly. Also, use correct articles and sentence structure, for example, "Kathmandu, which is the capital city of Nepal." Keep your answer concise and natural.

範例: I am originally from Batul, a small town in Nepal. Currently, I live in Kathmandu, which is the capital city of Nepal.

建議: Your answer is generally good but contains some grammatical errors and lacks linking words. Use plural forms correctly (trees, rivers, green places) and connect your ideas with linking words like "also" or "because." This will make your answer more coherent and natural.

範例: I like my hometown because it is calm and peaceful. There are many trees, rivers, and green places, which make the environment beautiful. Also, the air is fresh, so I feel happy living there.

建議: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Use the present perfect tense to indicate duration, and clarify the meaning. For example, "I have lived there for 19 years because it is where I spent my childhood."

範例: I have lived in my hometown for 19 years since it is where I spent my childhood.

建議: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases like "Umm the Doll" and "rivers St." Try to be clear and use correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas. For example, "Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it has many rivers and natural spots. The weather is nice, and the air is fresh, which makes it peaceful."

範例: Yes, my hometown is a great place for young people to visit because it has many rivers and beautiful natural areas. The weather is pleasant, and the fresh air creates a calm and peaceful atmosphere.

× I currently live in Kathmandu which is capital city of Nepal.

✓ I currently live in Kathmandu, which is the capital city of Nepal.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'capital city' because it refers to a specific, unique city in Nepal.

× There are many tree, river and green place.

✓ There are many trees, rivers, and green places.

The nouns 'tree', 'river', and 'green place' should be in plural form to agree with 'many', which indicates more than one.

× The way there is nice and the air is fresh.

✓ The way there is nice, and the air is fresh.

No article error here; sentence is correct. However, a comma is added for clarity.

× I lived there 19 years old because this is my childhood.

✓ I lived there for 19 years because this is my childhood.

The phrase '19 years old' is incorrect here; 'for 19 years' correctly expresses duration. Also, 'this is my childhood' is acceptable as present tense referring to a period in the past.

× Yes, I prefer young people going to visit Umm the Doll because there are so many rivers St. it.

✓ Yes, I prefer young people to visit Umm the Doll because there are so many rivers there.

The phrase 'prefer young people going to visit' is incorrect; 'prefer young people to visit' is correct. Also, 'St. it' is unclear and likely a typo; replaced with 'there' to refer to the place.

× It feels a calm and peaceful.

✓ It feels calm and peaceful.

The article 'a' is unnecessary before uncountable adjectives 'calm' and 'peaceful'.

× The weather is nice, the air is free so it made me feel peaceful.

✓ The weather is nice, the air is fresh, so it makes me feel peaceful.

'Air is free' is incorrect; 'air is fresh' is the correct expression. Also, 'made' should be 'makes' to match present tense context.