家乡— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use correct prepositions and articles, and provide clearer, more specific details about your hometown. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: My hometown is Kathmandu, the capital city of Nepal, located in the central part of the country. It is famous for its rich cultural heritage and beautiful natural scenery, attracting many tourists from around the world.

建議: Improve your answer by using more precise vocabulary and correct expressions, such as 'rich in culture' instead of 'rich of culture'. Also, try to avoid vague phrases like 'like everything' and provide specific examples. Use linking words to connect your points.

範例: I really appreciate my hometown because it is rich in culture and the people are very friendly and sociable. For example, if you want to make friends, you can easily start a conversation with strangers, and they are always willing to help.

建議: Focus on using correct tense and sentence structure. Instead of 'I'm living here since 2010', say 'I have been living here since 2010'. Also, avoid filler words and repetition. Make your answer clearer and more fluent.

範例: I have been living in Kathmandu since 2010, so it's been almost 15 years. I live with my family in a rented house because buying a home here is quite expensive, but we are planning to purchase one in the future.

建議: Improve your grammar and word choice, for example, use 'looking for a job' instead of 'looking for the job'. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide more specific examples.

範例: Yes, definitely. Kathmandu is an excellent place for young people because it offers many job opportunities and business prospects. Since it is the capital city, there are numerous offices, industries, colleges, and universities, which makes it easier to find employment and education.

× It's the capital of the Nepal and it relies on the Midwestern part of the Nepal.

✓ It's the capital of Nepal and it lies in the midwestern part of Nepal.

The definite article 'the' is not used before country names like 'Nepal'. Also, 'relies on' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'lies in' to indicate location.

× Actually, it's very rich of cold shore and many tourists come from different country to visit Nepal.

✓ Actually, it's very rich in cold shores and many tourists come from different countries to visit Nepal.

The correct preposition after 'rich' is 'in', not 'of'. Also, 'cold shore' should be plural 'cold shores' and 'different country' should be plural 'different countries'.

× many tourists come from different country to visit Nepal.

✓ many tourists come from different countries to visit Nepal.

The noun 'country' should be plural 'countries' to agree with 'many tourists'.

× people are very friendly and socially.

✓ people are very friendly and social.

The adjective 'social' is correct here to describe people; 'socially' is an adverb and does not fit.

× I'm living here since 2010, I think it's been almost 15 years and I'm living with my family here.

✓ I've been living here since 2010, I think it's been almost 15 years and I'm living with my family here.

When indicating duration from a point in the past until now, present perfect continuous tense 'have been living' is used, not simple present 'I'm living'.

× We're planning for on our, our home, but now it's very expensive to buy.

✓ We're planning to build our own home, but now it's very expensive to buy.

The phrase 'planning for on' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'planning to build' or 'planning to have'.

× If you want to looking for the job or any other businesses, you can get instantly here because it's the capital of Nepal.

✓ If you want to look for a job or any other business, you can get one instantly here because it's the capital of Nepal.

After 'want to', the base form of the verb 'look' is used, not the '-ing' form 'looking'. Also, 'the job' should be 'a job' and 'businesses' should be singular 'business' in this context.

× you will find more educational institution like a college, universities.

✓ you will find more educational institutions like colleges and universities.

The noun 'institution' should be plural 'institutions' to agree with 'more'. Also, 'college' should be plural 'colleges' to match 'universities'.