家乡— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ không chính xác như "smelly sense landscape" và nên dùng câu ngắn gọn, dễ hiểu. Hãy tập trung mô tả đặc điểm của quê hương một cách cụ thể và tự nhiên hơn.

範例: My hometown is Ho Chi Minh City, located in the south of Vietnam. It is a vibrant city that combines modern urban areas with peaceful countryside. The city is famous for its coffee culture and numerous small local shops.

建議: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy mô tả cụ thể hơn về những điều bạn thích, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và liên kết các ý với nhau để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I like the friendly people and the delicious food in my hometown. The locals are very kind, and the food is both affordable and tasty. For example, I often buy fresh ingredients from the local market to cook traditional dishes.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên nói rõ khoảng thời gian bạn đã sống ở đó và thói quen hiện tại của bạn.

範例: I have lived in my hometown for about eight years. After I finished university, I moved to another city for work, but I usually return home during holidays and weekends.

建議: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy trình bày ý kiến của bạn một cách mạch lạc, sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối các ý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể hơn.

範例: To be honest, I don't think my hometown is ideal for young people because most big companies and better career opportunities are in larger cities. For example, many young people leave to find jobs elsewhere and only come back during holidays and weekends.

× My hometown, located in the South of Vietnam in a province Ho Chi Minh City, is yeah, a peaceful place with a mix of countryside and developing areas.

✓ My hometown, located in the South of Vietnam in the province of Ho Chi Minh City, is a peaceful place with a mix of countryside and developing areas.

The sentence has structural issues including unnecessary filler 'yeah' and missing article 'the' before 'province'. Removing 'yeah' and adding 'the' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× It has smelly sense landscape but also feature more coffee and small local shops.

✓ It has a beautiful landscape but also features many coffee shops and small local shops.

The phrase 'smelly sense landscape' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended to describe the landscape positively. 'Feature' should be 'features' to agree with singular subject 'It'. 'More coffee' is vague; 'many coffee shops' is clearer.

× I like the people and the food to watch.

✓ I like the people and the food to eat.

'Food to watch' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'food to eat' as food is consumed, not watched.

× The people local are very kind and friendly and the foods also cheap and delicious.

✓ The local people are very kind and friendly, and the food is also cheap and delicious.

'People local' should be 'local people' for correct adjective order. 'Foods' is generally uncountable in this context, so 'food' is correct. Also, 'food is' agrees with singular noun.

× For instance, I don't forget to take off myself and the fresh food from local market in my hometown.

✓ For instance, I never forget to buy fresh food from the local market in my hometown.

The phrase 'take off myself' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'buy fresh food'. Also, 'local market' needs the definite article 'the'.

× I lived there for a much of like around eight years or only more to another city when I stopped university, for example.

✓ I lived there for about eight years and moved to another city when I finished university, for example.

'A much of like around' is incorrect quantifier usage; 'about' is appropriate. 'Stopped university' should be 'finished university' to indicate completion. 'Only more to another city' is unclear and corrected to 'moved to another city'.

× I just come back during holidays and weekend.

✓ I just come back during holidays and weekends.

'Weekend' should be plural 'weekends' to match 'holidays'. The present tense 'come back' is acceptable if habitual.

× To be honest I don't think so because it's like big companies and career opportunity more more good job are in the big city with better salaries and strength to grow.

✓ To be honest, I don't think so because big companies and better career opportunities are in the big city, which offers better salaries and chances to grow.

The sentence has awkward conjunctions and word order. 'Like' is unnecessary. 'More more good job' is incorrect; replaced with 'better career opportunities'. Added commas and rephrased for clarity.

× For example, many young people return only during on holidays and weekends.

✓ For example, many young people return only during holidays and weekends.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect after 'during'. 'During' already indicates the time period, so 'on' should be removed.