家乡— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer clearer and more organized. Start with a direct statement about your hometown, then add details without confusing phrases. Avoid unclear or incorrect expressions like "raising his parents are". Keep your sentences simple and coherent.

範例: My hometown is Esperanza, located in the southern part of Mindanao, Philippines. I was born and raised there, and I still live in my own house in Esperanza.

建議: Focus on giving clear and specific reasons why you like your hometown. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid unclear phrases like "I will save" or "even race". Try to express your thoughts in simple, correct sentences.

範例: I like my hometown because it is close to nature, with beautiful landscapes. Also, the people are friendly and I have known many of them since I was born.

建議: Answer the question directly and clearly. Use correct tense and sentence structure. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear expressions. For example, say how many years you have lived there and your current age if relevant.

範例: I have lived in my hometown for over 35 years since I was born, and I still live here now.

建議: Make your answer more complete and coherent. Start with a clear opinion, then explain why. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid incomplete sentences like "The people here are very helpful when. You."

範例: I think my hometown is a good place for young people because the community is friendly and supportive. I recommend young individuals to visit and experience living here.

× I was born in Esperanza and raising his parents are and even I'm still living here in Esperanza in my very own.

✓ I was born in Esperanza and raised by my parents, and I am still living here in Esperanza in my own home.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'raising his parents are' which is grammatically incorrect and confusing. The correct form is 'raised by my parents' to indicate who took care of the speaker. Also, 'in my very own' is incomplete; it should be 'in my own home' to clarify the meaning.

× What I like about my hometown is that it is close to the nature and also the people living in our hometown. I know a lot of them and I will save because I know each and everyone in our hometown since I was born and even race.

✓ What I like about my hometown is that it is close to nature and also the people living there. I know a lot of them and I feel safe because I know each and every one in our hometown since I was born and even grew up here.

The phrase 'close to the nature' should be 'close to nature' as 'nature' is uncountable and does not need 'the'. 'I will save' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'I feel safe'. 'Each and everyone' should be 'each and every one'. 'Even race' is unclear and likely meant to be 'even grew up here' to indicate lifelong familiarity.

× I think I'm living here in my hometown for. Over 3 decades since I will. I was already 35 years old and I'm still living here so. It's very long time ago.

✓ I think I have been living here in my hometown for over 3 decades. I am already 35 years old and I am still living here. It has been a very long time.

The original sentence has tense inconsistencies and incomplete thoughts. 'I'm living here for over 3 decades' should be present perfect continuous 'I have been living here for over 3 decades' to indicate duration. 'Since I will' is incorrect and unclear. 'It's very long time ago' should be 'It has been a very long time' to correctly express the duration.

× I would say that it is and they recommend my hometown to especially to young individual to come and visit our hometown.

✓ I would say that it is, and I recommend my hometown especially to young individuals to come and visit.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'they recommend' which is unclear who 'they' refers to; it should be 'I recommend'. 'Young individual' should be plural 'young individuals' to match the context. Also, the sentence needs proper conjunction and punctuation for clarity.

× An experience living here in our hometown. The people here are very helpful when. You.

✓ It is a great experience living here in our hometown. The people here are very helpful to you.

The original sentences are fragments and incomplete. 'An experience living here in our hometown' lacks a verb and subject; it should be 'It is a great experience living here in our hometown.' 'The people here are very helpful when. You.' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'The people here are very helpful to you.' for clarity and correctness.