工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and directly answer first ("I'm currently a student"). Then add one or two brief, specific details about your plans using linking words. Avoid redundancy ("I'm also... and..." repeated). Keep to at most 3–4 short sentences.

範例: I'm currently a student. In the future I plan to study abroad to gain expertise in my field, and after that I hope to pursue work opportunities related to my studies.

建議: Give a direct answer immediately ("I don't work"). You can add a short supporting detail about why or what you focus on instead. Avoid repeating phrasing from previous answer.

範例: I don't work at the moment; I'm focusing on my studies full-time and preparing for postgraduate opportunities abroad.

建議: The examiner asked about a workplace, so first clarify you can't judge workplaces because you haven't worked. Then briefly answer the alternative question about your school with one clear topic sentence and one or two specific details linked logically. Avoid long unrelated background.

範例: I can't really judge workplaces because I haven't worked yet. However, I can say my high school was excellent academically; it had strong exam results and supportive teachers, which helped me prepare for university.

建議: Start by clarifying whether you mean workplace or study place. Give a direct response and one reason. Use a linking word to connect the reason and keep it concise.

範例: If you mean my study place, yes—I like it because the teachers are supportive and the campus has good study facilities. If you mean a workplace, I can't say since I haven't worked yet.

建議: Be specific about the kind of job and the steps you will take. Start with a clear topic sentence about your plan, then give one or two concrete details or reasons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "more appropriate" or "more demanding" without examples.

範例: In the future I plan to work in project management within the tech industry. To prepare, I want to study abroad for a master's degree and gain internships to develop practical skills and industry experience.

× Well currently I'm a student and in the future I'm planning to study abroad and gain expertise there as well as I'm also planning for work related opportunities.

✓ Well, currently I'm a student, and in the future I'm planning to study abroad and gain expertise there, and I'm also planning to look for work-related opportunities.

The original sentence has issues with parallel structure and word choice. Use consistent conjunctions and verbs ('planning to study' and 'planning to look for') to maintain parallelism. Add hyphen in 'work-related' as a compound adjective. Also add commas for clarity.

× As I mentioned above that currently I'm a student so I don't work anywhere.

✓ As I mentioned above, I am currently a student, so I don't work anywhere.

The clause 'As I mentioned above that' is ungrammatical; remove 'that' and place commas to separate clauses. Use 'I am currently' for natural word order.

× I don't know anything regarding work, but I can tell you about my studying experience.

✓ I don't know much about work, but I can tell you about my study experience.

'Anything regarding work' is wordy; 'much about work' is more natural. Use 'study experience' rather than 'studying experience' for a noun phrase here.

× I have done my schooling from a regional high school, which is very good and also it was quite famous for its academic performance.

✓ I completed my schooling at a regional high school, which was very good and quite well known for its academic performance.

Use 'completed my schooling' or 'I went to' instead of 'have done my schooling from'. Use preposition 'at' not 'from'. Match tense: simple past 'was' fits. 'Quite well known' is a more natural phrase than 'quite famous for' in this context.

× Yes, I definitely like the place where I study because I don't work so I don't know much about workplaces.

✓ Yes, I definitely like the place where I study because I don't work, so I don't know much about workplaces.

Add a comma before 'so' to separate independent clauses. Sentence is otherwise fine; commas improve readability.

× In the future, I will definitely look forward for more appropriate as well as more demanding jobs because I always try to gain expertise understanding of different fields of work.

✓ In the future, I will definitely look for more appropriate and more demanding jobs because I always try to gain expertise and understanding in different fields of work.

Use 'look for' not 'look forward for'. Remove 'as well as' and use 'and' for simplicity. Insert 'and' between 'expertise' and 'understanding' and use preposition 'in' with 'fields of work'. This corrects verb and preposition errors and improves parallelism.