工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct small grammar issues (e.g., use articles: 'a rehabilitation program').

範例: I work as a physiatrist at a hospital. I graduated from a rehabilitation program two years ago, so I have been practicing in this specialty for two years.

建議: Give a clear main sentence and include specific details, avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g., 'the most famous hospitals' or 'one of the most famous hospitals'). Use a linking phrase to connect study history to current work.

範例: I work at a large public hospital in Bangkok, which is one of the most renowned hospitals in Thailand. In fact, I have been connected to this hospital since my first year as a medical student, so I know the place well.

建議: Start with a direct answer and then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid repeating previous facts; instead, give concrete examples of what makes it good (e.g., supportive team, training opportunities).

範例: Yes, definitely. The staff are very supportive and I have learned a lot through hands-on training and mentorship, which gave me many memorable experiences.

建議: Answer directly and briefly, then add a specific detail or small contrast. Use a linking word (e.g., 'however') to make it coherent.

範例: If you mean the atmosphere, I don't like it very much because it's almost always crowded. However, I appreciate the professional environment and learning opportunities despite the crowds.

建議: Provide a clear, complete sentence with one or two specific plans and reasons. Correct grammar and finish your thought. Use linking words to show purpose (e.g., 'so that', 'because').

範例: I plan to study a new world-class rehabilitation program in Singapore so that I can gain advanced skills and improve my career opportunities in rehabilitation medicine.

× Currently I'm working at a hospital as a physiatrist.

✓ Currently I work at a hospital as a physiatrist.

Use simple present to describe a current job or regular employment. 'I'm working' (present continuous) can be used for temporary actions, but when stating one's occupation, simple present ('I work') is more natural and matches the context of a permanent job.

× I just graduated from rehabilitation program two years ago, so I have been working as a physiatrist for two years.

✓ I graduated from the rehabilitation program two years ago, so I have been working as a physiatrist for two years.

The phrase 'just graduated' conflicts with 'two years ago' — 'just' suggests very recently. Use simple past 'I graduated' with the time expression 'two years ago'. Also include the definite article 'the' before 'rehabilitation program' for specificity.

× I work at a public hospital in Bangkok. It is one of the most famous hospital in Thailand.

✓ I work at a public hospital in Bangkok. It is one of the most famous hospitals in Thailand.

When referring to 'one of the most famous', the noun should be plural ('hospitals') because you are selecting one item from a group. Also keep 'the' before 'most famous' as given; 'in Thailand' is correct.

× I actually I have studied in this hospital since the first year of medical student.

✓ Actually, I have studied at this hospital since my first year as a medical student.

The original repeats 'I' and uses incorrect preposition 'in' for attending a hospital; use 'at' for institutions. 'Since' requires a point in time: 'my first year as a medical student' is clear. Remove duplicated 'I' and reorder for natural flow.

× Yes, definitely. I have many good colleagues and friends and actually I have studied in this hospital too and I gained many memorable experiences from this.

✓ Yes, definitely. I have many good colleagues and friends, and I actually studied at this hospital too, where I gained many memorable experiences.

Mixes present perfect and simple past awkwardly. Use simple past 'studied' with 'gained' to describe past experiences at the hospital. Use 'at' for location and restructure to avoid clumsy 'from this.'

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The examiner's question should use 'Do you like...' rather than 'Would you like...' because it asks about a present preference. 'Would you like' implies offering or hypotheticals. Changing to 'Do you like' matches the expected simple present form.

× If you mean about the atmosphere and the surroundings, I would say that I don't like it very much because the place is very crowded and full of people all the time.

✓ If you mean the atmosphere and the surroundings, I would say that I don't like them very much because the place is very crowded and full of people all the time.

'Mean about' is incorrect; use 'mean' without 'about.' 'The atmosphere and the surroundings' are plural, so refer to them with 'them' rather than 'it.' This corrects pronoun agreement and preposition use.

× What are your future work plans?

✓ What are your future work plans?

This sentence is correct as written and needs no change. It uses appropriate future reference structure.

× I want to study abroad in Singapore and new world rehabilitation program I expect that my career opportunities will be improved if I.

✓ I want to study abroad in Singapore in the New World Rehabilitation program because I expect that my career opportunities will improve if I do.

The original sentence is fragmented and missing verbs and articles. Add the article 'the' before the program name or capitalize it as a proper noun ('New World Rehabilitation program') and insert a conjunction ('because') to connect clauses. 'Will be improved' is passive and awkward; use active 'will improve' and complete the conditional with 'if I do.' Ensure the sentence ends with a completed clause.