工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and informative but a bit long and slightly repetitive (mentions preparing for university and improving English twice). Start with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea.

範例: I am preparing to enter university to study psychology abroad. For that reason, I’m focusing on improving my English by taking IELTS courses and practicing speaking regularly so I can meet the admission requirements.

建議: Good direct response but repetitive with previous answer. Use a clear topic sentence and a brief supporting detail with a linking word. Be concise and avoid restating the same full reasons already given.

範例: I don’t work at the moment because I’m preparing for university. For example, I spend most days studying English and completing application tasks for psychology programs abroad.

建議: This answer does not directly address the question and repeats prior information. When asked about a place, imagine a workplace or clarify you are not working and then briefly explain what would make a workplace good. Use linking words to make it coherent.

範例: I’m not working right now, so I can’t judge an actual workplace. However, a good workplace for me would offer clear career development and supportive colleagues, which would help me learn and stay motivated.

建議: Your idea is clear but there are grammar errors and confusing phrasing ("allows stress environment", "A competitive pay"). Make one clear topic sentence and then add two specific preferences with linking words. Use correct collocations like 'low-stress environment' and 'competitive pay'.

範例: Yes. I would like to work in a modern, professional office because it feels motivating. Also, a low-stress environment and competitive pay would help me stay productive and focused on my tasks.

建議: Saying "I don't know" ends the conversation. Instead, give a brief honest plan or a realistic short-term goal. Start with a topic sentence and support it with one or two specifics or steps you plan to take. This shows direction even if long-term plans are unclear.

範例: I plan to focus on completing my psychology degree and gaining relevant experience through internships. For instance, I hope to secure a research assistant role during university to build practical skills and decide on a specialization later.

× I am currently preparing to enter university.

✓ I am currently preparing to enter university.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses present continuous to describe an ongoing plan. Keep as is.

× I am dedicating myself to improving my English because I plan to study psychology at an International University abroad, and I believe education strongly contributes to personal development.

✓ I am dedicating myself to improving my English because I plan to study psychology at an international university abroad, and I believe education strongly contributes to personal development.

Change 'International University' to lowercase 'international university' because it is a common noun phrase here, not a proper noun. This is an article/capitalization style issue related to noun usage; grammar and tense are otherwise correct.

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you work?

The '>' character is extraneous punctuation likely from transcription. Remove it to form a correct question. This is a sentence structure/punctuation correction.

× At the moment I'm not working, I am preparing to start university and spending a lot of time improving my English because I plan to study psychology abroad next year.

✓ At the moment I'm not working; I am preparing to start university and spending a lot of time improving my English because I plan to study psychology abroad next year.

Use a semicolon or separate into two sentences to avoid a comma splice. The verbs and tenses are appropriate, but joining independent clauses with a comma is incorrect; fix punctuation to improve sentence structure.

× At the moment I am not working, I am preparing for the IELTS test because this is one step towards my dream, in particular study board.

✓ At the moment I am not working; I am preparing for the IELTS test because this is one step towards my dream, in particular studying abroad.

Replace the comma with a semicolon to avoid a comma splice. Change 'in particular study board' (nonsensical) to 'in particular studying abroad' which matches the intended meaning. Also keep present continuous tense for ongoing preparation.

× I'd like to work in a modern high class office that offers a good salary and allows stress environment.

✓ I'd like to work in a modern, high-class office that offers a good salary and has a low-stress environment.

'High class' should be hyphenated as 'high-class' and preceded by a comma when listing adjectives; 'allows stress environment' is ungrammatical — use 'has a low-stress environment' to express desire for minimal stress. Modal 'I'd like' is correct.

× For me, a tall building feels more professional and having an A competitive pay would help me stay productive.

✓ For me, a tall building feels more professional, and having competitive pay would help me stay productive.

Remove the capital 'A' before 'competitive' and the article 'a' is unnecessary; 'competitive pay' is a correct noun phrase. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Adjust capitalization and article use.

× I don't know how to answer this question.

✓ I don't know how to answer this question.

No grammatical correction needed; the sentence correctly uses present simple to express inability. Keep as is.