工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to give a clear and direct answer to the question. Use simple and correct sentence structures to explain your job. Avoid unclear phrases and focus on clarity.

範例: I work as a data analyst in the television shopping industry. My job involves analyzing sales data to help improve our products.

建議: Provide a clear and complete answer about your workplace. Use correct verb tenses and linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: I work at a company that develops a TV watching application in the entertainment industry. I analyze data and create graphs to support decision-making.

建議: Try to organize your answer with linking words and avoid filler words like 'umm'. Be specific about why you like the place, mentioning environment and salary clearly.

範例: Definitely, it is a very relaxed and friendly place to work. Moreover, the salary is good, which makes it a great workplace.

建議: Answer directly and clearly. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure to express your feelings about your workplace.

範例: Yes, I would like to work there forever because I enjoy the environment and I am very happy with my job.

建議: Give a clear and structured answer. Use correct prepositions and sentence order. Mention your future plans with examples and reasons.

範例: In the future, I would like to work as a consultant at McKinsey or join a big startup like Google, Netflix, or Mercury to gain more experience.

× I work, my job is the data analyst product in the shopping which is up the industry television.

✓ I work as a data analyst in the shopping industry, which is related to television.

The original sentence has incorrect sentence structure and unclear phrasing. It combines two independent clauses without proper conjunction or punctuation and uses awkward expressions like 'data analyst product' and 'shopping which is up the industry television'. The correction clarifies the job role and industry with proper sentence structure.

× I work at 7:00 which is application for watch TV in the entertainment industry.

✓ I work at 7:00 in an application for watching TV in the entertainment industry.

The original sentence is unclear and incorrectly structured. 'Which is application for watch TV' is grammatically incorrect. The correction uses 'in an application for watching TV' to clarify the meaning and correct verb form.

× I were analyze this thing data and create graph.

✓ I analyze this data and create graphs.

The original sentence uses 'were' incorrectly with 'analyze'. 'Were' is past tense plural or subjunctive, but the sentence context requires present tense. Also, 'this thing data' is incorrect; it should be 'this data'. The correction uses present tense verbs and correct noun usage.

× Definitely because it's a place very, very relaxed, very friendly, umm and the salary is just umm, I finish is on, it's a good place.

✓ Definitely, because it's a very, very relaxed and very friendly place, and the salary is good. It's a good place to work.

The original sentence misplaces adjectives and adverbs and has unclear phrases like 'I finish is on'. The correction places 'very' before adjectives correctly and clarifies the salary statement.

× I think yes, my play I would like forever. I don't know the place. Very, very enjoy. I am very happy.

✓ I think yes, I would like to stay at my workplace forever. I really enjoy the place. I am very happy.

The original sentence has unclear and incorrect phrases like 'my play I would like forever' and 'Very, very enjoy'. The correction clarifies the meaning with proper sentence structure and vocabulary.

× About job, this is I I would like work in consult in Mackenzie or big startup for instance Google, Netflix, Mercury etcetera.

✓ Regarding my job, I would like to work as a consultant at McKinsey or a big startup, for instance, Google, Netflix, or Mercury.

The original sentence has repetition ('I I'), incorrect prepositions ('in consult in'), and unclear company names. The correction fixes these issues and improves clarity and grammar.