工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer provides relevant information but is a bit long and slightly unclear. Try to make your response more concise and natural by directly answering the question first, then adding brief supporting details. Also, use correct verb tenses and articles for clarity.

範例: I graduated from university two years ago and have been working as a business manager in a high-tech company since then.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using correct prepositions and articles. Also, avoid redundancy and be specific about your role and the company's location.

範例: I work as an officer at Plasmatic Sepahan Company, which is located in an industrial area about 20 minutes from my home. The company has around 20 employees.

建議: Your answer is generally good but could be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and by correcting verb tenses. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary to express your thoughts naturally.

範例: Yes, I found the company's atmosphere friendly, and since my work was related to my university major, I enjoyed it. Moreover, I had many professional colleagues who motivated me to expand my knowledge.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use clear topic sentences and linking words like 'firstly' and 'secondly' correctly. Also, be more specific and natural in expressing dissatisfaction.

範例: I didn't like the place where I worked for several reasons. Firstly, the salary was low, which I found unsatisfactory. Secondly, I felt stuck in my position because there were few opportunities for promotion.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to form a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, use correct verb forms and articles to improve clarity.

範例: Since my major is biomedical engineering, I plan to pursue a master's degree in coding. Therefore, I would like to work in a company that specializes in implants and coatings, as I am very interested in this field.

× I graduated from university two years ago and immediately I went to work and I worked as a business manager in high technology company.

✓ I graduated from university two years ago and immediately went to work as a business manager in a high technology company.

The sentence has redundancy with 'I went to work and I worked'. The phrase 'I went to work' and 'I worked' are repetitive. Also, the article 'a' is missing before 'high technology company'. The correction removes redundancy and adds the article for clarity.

× I was working in a plasmatic Sepahan company which is located in industrial as an officer with 20 minutes minutes distance of my home and it has 20 employees at.

✓ I was working at Plasmatic Sepahan Company, which is located in an industrial area, as an officer 20 minutes away from my home, and it has 20 employees.

The preposition 'in' should be 'at' when referring to a company. 'Located in industrial' is incomplete; it should be 'located in an industrial area'. '20 minutes minutes distance of my home' is incorrect; it should be '20 minutes away from my home'. The preposition 'at' at the end is unnecessary. The correction fixes these prepositional errors for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, I found the atmosphere of this company friendly and my work was related to my university major.

✓ Yes, I found the atmosphere of this company friendly, and my work was related to my university major.

A comma is needed before 'and' to separate two independent clauses. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× So I have enjoyed working and I had a lot of professional colleagues which motivate me for my knowledge.

✓ So I enjoyed working and had a lot of professional colleagues who motivated me to improve my knowledge.

The sentence mixes present perfect 'have enjoyed' with past tense 'had'. Since the context is past, 'enjoyed' is appropriate. 'Which' should be 'who' when referring to people. 'Motivate me for my knowledge' is incorrect; it should be 'motivated me to improve my knowledge' for clarity.

× I didn't like the place that I was and for several reasons.

✓ I didn't like the place where I was for several reasons.

The phrase 'the place that I was' is awkward; 'the place where I was' is correct. Also, 'and' is unnecessary before 'for several reasons'.

× Firstly, the salary was low which I was not satisfied that.

✓ Firstly, the salary was low, which I was not satisfied with.

The phrase 'which I was not satisfied that' is incorrect. The correct form is 'which I was not satisfied with' because 'satisfied' requires the preposition 'with'.

× Secondly, I felt stuck in my position because the opportunities was not OK to promote.

✓ Secondly, I felt stuck in my position because the opportunities were not good for promotion.

'Opportunities' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' not 'was'. 'Not OK to promote' is awkward; 'not good for promotion' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Since my university major is biomedical engineering and I would like to study in coding fields master.

✓ Since my university major is biomedical engineering, I would like to study for a master's degree in coding fields.

The sentence lacks proper structure and articles. 'Study in coding fields master' is incorrect; it should be 'study for a master's degree in coding fields'. Also, a comma is needed after the first clause.

× So I like to work in a company which are working on implants and coating that I am interested in this field.

✓ So I would like to work in a company that works on implants and coatings, as I am interested in this field.

'Company' is singular, so the verb should be 'works' not 'are working'. 'Coating' should be plural 'coatings' to match 'implants'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.