工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: คำตอบควรใช้ภาษาอังกฤษที่เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น และหลีกเลี่ยงความผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์ เช่น การใช้คำว่า 'help her' ที่ไม่ชัดเจน และควรจัดระเบียบประโยคให้กระชับและชัดเจน เช่น การใช้ประโยคเชื่อมโยงเพื่ออธิบายแผนการเรียนต่ออย่างชัดเจน

範例: I currently work as a mining engineer at Lewittiya Company, where I have been employed for two years since graduating. However, I am planning to pursue a postgraduate program to further my education.

建議: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำและโครงสร้างประโยคให้ถูกต้องและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น เช่น การใช้คำว่า 'many place' ควรเป็น 'many places' และลดคำเติมเต็มที่ไม่จำเป็น เช่น 'uh' รวมถึงใช้ linking words เพื่อความลื่นไหลของประโยค

範例: I mainly work in the office in Bangkok. However, I often travel to various mining sites across Thailand because my job requires me to supervise operations on location.

建議: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำให้ถูกต้อง เช่น 'a high salaries' ควรเป็น 'high salaries' หรือ 'a high salary' และเพิ่มความเชื่อมโยงระหว่างประโยคเพื่อให้คำตอบดูเป็นธรรมชาติและสมบูรณ์มากขึ้น

範例: Yes, it is a good place to work. The company offers high salaries and a pleasant working environment. Moreover, my colleagues are very friendly. However, one downside is that there is no overtime pay.

建議: ควรใช้คำและโครงสร้างประโยคที่เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น เช่น 'I have no passion with this job any more' ควรเป็น 'I have lost my passion for this job' และใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิดอย่างชัดเจน

範例: Yes, I like my current company because it is a good workplace. However, I am considering quitting and changing jobs because I have lost my passion for this field.

建議: ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และการใช้คำ เช่น 'I now currently interest in researching industry' ควรเป็น 'I am currently interested in the research industry' และใช้ linking words เพื่อให้ประโยคลื่นไหลและชัดเจน

範例: I am planning to study abroad and hope to work there after graduation. Currently, I am interested in the research industry, so I want to learn more about it through my studies.

× I help her here since I graduated 2 years ago.

✓ I have been helping here since I graduated 2 years ago.

The pronoun 'her' is incorrectly used; it should be omitted or replaced with a correct object. Also, the present perfect continuous tense 'have been helping' is appropriate to indicate an action continuing from the past to the present.

× I mainly work in the office in Bangkok.

✓ I mainly work at the office in Bangkok.

The preposition 'at' is more appropriate when referring to a specific workplace location like 'the office'.

× I also travel to work in many place in Thailand because I was as a mining engineer, so I have to go to mines.

✓ I also travel to work in many places in Thailand because I am a mining engineer, so I have to go to mines.

The noun 'place' should be plural 'places' to match 'many'. Also, 'was as a mining engineer' is incorrect; it should be 'am a mining engineer' to indicate current occupation.

× The company provides a high salaries and a good working environment.

✓ The company provides high salaries and a good working environment.

The article 'a' should not be used before the plural noun 'salaries'. Removing 'a' corrects the quantifier usage.

× Moreover, my workers are so friendly.

✓ Moreover, my coworkers are very friendly.

The term 'workers' is less appropriate; 'coworkers' better fits the context. Also, 'so friendly' is informal; 'very friendly' is more suitable.

× However, the disadvantage is that there is no overtime pay.

✓ However, the disadvantage is that there is no overtime pay.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Yes, I like my current company because it is good.

✓ Yes, I like my current company because it is good.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× That said, I still want to quit and change a job because I have no passion with this job any more.

✓ That said, I still want to quit and change jobs because I have no passion for this job anymore.

The phrase 'change a job' is incorrect; 'change jobs' is the correct expression. Also, 'passion with' should be 'passion for'. 'Anymore' is one word.

× I am planning to study abroad and I want to work there after my graduation.

✓ I am planning to study abroad and want to work there after my graduation.

The sentence is mostly correct; removing the second 'I' improves fluency but is optional.

× I now currently interest in researching industry so I want to study more about it.

✓ I am currently interested in the research industry, so I want to study more about it.

The phrase 'I now currently interest' is incorrect; it should be 'I am currently interested'. Also, 'researching industry' should be 'research industry' or 'the research industry'.