工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy. For example, instead of repeating the purpose of the institute twice, you can combine the information smoothly. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas better.

範例: I am currently working as a special educator at a vocational institute that trains children with special needs. I find this job very rewarding because it helps these students become more independent in society.

建議: Your answer provides good details but repeats some information from the previous answer. To improve, try to avoid repetition and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, be careful with articles, for example, use 'a vocational institute' instead of 'an vocational institute'.

範例: I work as a special educator at a vocational institute where I train children with various special needs, including intellectual disabilities, cerebral palsy, ADHD, autism, and blindness. This role is very fulfilling for me.

建議: Your answer has good points but some phrases are unnatural, such as 'enjoy walking at my office'. Also, the sentence structure can be improved for clarity. Use linking words like 'and' or 'which' to connect ideas. Pay attention to article usage and plural forms.

範例: Definitely, I enjoy working at my office because it provides a positive environment. Moreover, it has excellent amenities, such as a well-equipped area, advanced technology, and a computer lab, which have helped me develop the skills needed for my professional growth.

建議: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical errors and could be more fluent. For example, 'makes it easier' should be connected properly with the previous clause. Use linking words like 'which' or 'that' to improve coherence. Also, pluralize 'challenge' to 'challenges' and add articles where needed.

範例: Definitely, I love working there because the friendly atmosphere makes it easier to collaborate with my colleagues and manager. They are very considerate and always ready to help me whenever I face challenges in any task.

建議: Your answer is detailed and relevant, but some phrases can be more natural. For example, say 'in the future' instead of 'in future', and 'children with ADHD and autism' instead of 'children having ADSD and autism'. Also, use linking words like 'therefore' to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: In the future, I aim to become an expert in my profession, especially in working with children with ADHD and autism. Therefore, I am gaining specialized skills and currently undergoing a course to help improve their concentration and social interaction skills.

× Currently, I am employed as a special educator in an vocational institute.

✓ Currently, I am employed as a special educator in a vocational institute.

The article 'an' is used before words that begin with a vowel sound. Since 'vocational' starts with a consonant sound 'v', the correct article is 'a'. This is a common article usage error.

× I enjoy walking at my office because it provides me a positive environment.

✓ I enjoy working at my office because it provides me a positive environment.

The verb 'walking' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is 'working'. 'Walking' means moving on foot, which does not fit the context of enjoying the workplace. This is a verb choice error.

× Moreover, it offers excellent amenities such as well equipped area, advanced technology and computer lab that helped me to gain the required skill for my professional growth.

✓ Moreover, it offers excellent amenities such as a well-equipped area, advanced technology, and a computer lab that help me to gain the required skills for my professional growth.

The phrase 'well equipped area' needs a hyphen to form the compound adjective 'well-equipped'. Also, singular nouns 'area' and 'computer lab' need articles 'a'. The verb 'helped' should be present tense 'help' to match the ongoing action. 'Skill' should be plural 'skills' as it refers to multiple abilities.

× Definitely, I love working there because of the friendly atmosphere, makes it easier to collaborate with my colleagues as well as with my manager.

✓ Definitely, I love working there because of the friendly atmosphere, which makes it easier to collaborate with my colleagues as well as with my manager.

The sentence is a comma splice; the clause after the comma lacks a subject. Adding 'which' correctly connects the clauses and clarifies the meaning.

× They are quite considerate and always ready to help me whenever I face challenge in any task.

✓ They are quite considerate and always ready to help me whenever I face a challenge in any task.

The noun 'challenge' is countable and requires the article 'a' before it. Omitting the article is incorrect usage of pronouns and articles.

× In future, I am aiming to become an expert in my profession, especially while dealing with children having ADSD and autism.

✓ In the future, I am aiming to become an expert in my profession, especially while dealing with children having ADHD and autism.

The phrase 'In future' should be 'In the future' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'ADSD' seems to be a typo; the correct term is 'ADHD' (Attention Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder).

× So for this purpose, I'm gaining specialized skills and undergoing a course so that I can help them to increase their concentration level as well as their social interaction skills.

✓ So for this purpose, I'm gaining specialized skills and undergoing a course so that I can help them increase their concentration levels as well as their social interaction skills.

The phrase 'help them to increase' is better expressed as 'help them increase' without 'to'. Also, 'concentration level' should be plural 'concentration levels' to match 'skills' and indicate multiple aspects.