工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating 'as a nurse' twice and try to use a smoother sentence structure.

範例: I currently work as a nurse at a hospital and have been doing so for two years.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly, use correct prepositions, and avoid repetition. Also, clarify the location and your role more precisely.

範例: I work as a nurse at the healthcare center in Bojangle, where I take care of patients. Becoming a nurse has always been one of my biggest dreams.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer sentence structure and better linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing and be more specific about what makes the place good.

範例: Yes, it's a great place to work because the working conditions are smooth, satisfying, and stress-free. Additionally, working there has exposed me to many experiences and allows me to help patients recover and regain their daily activities.

建議: Your answer is good but could be more concise and natural. Try to avoid redundancy and improve linking between ideas.

範例: I really enjoy working there because it's comfortable and my employer supports us well. Also, patients and colleagues cooperate, which makes the job easier and more rewarding when I see patients recover.

建議: Your answer has good content but needs clearer expression and grammar correction. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid awkward phrasing.

範例: In the future, I plan to improve my working environment and conditions. I also intend to travel abroad to gain more experience and then return to my home country to help enhance healthcare facilities by sharing the knowledge I have gained.

× I walk into a precisely at the healthcare center in Bojangle and I'm a nurse in the hospital take care of patient and being a nurse is one of my my best dream.

✓ I work precisely at the healthcare center in Bojangle and I'm a nurse in the hospital taking care of patients. Being a nurse is one of my best dreams.

The original sentence uses 'walk' instead of 'work', which is a vocabulary error but also affects verb usage. 'Take care of patient' lacks the plural form and correct verb form; it should be 'taking care of patients' to indicate ongoing action. 'Being a nurse is one of my my best dream' has a pluralization error; 'dream' should be 'dreams'. The present participle 'taking' correctly shows the ongoing action of caring for patients.

× I walk into a precisely at the healthcare center in Bojangle and I'm a nurse in the hospital take care of patient and being a nurse is one of my my best dream.

✓ I work precisely at the healthcare center in Bojangle and I'm a nurse in the hospital taking care of patients. Being a nurse is one of my best dreams.

The word 'patient' should be plural 'patients' because a nurse typically cares for multiple patients. Also, 'dream' should be plural 'dreams' because it refers to one of multiple aspirations.

× I walk into a precisely at the healthcare center in Bojangle and I'm a nurse in the hospital take care of patient and being a nurse is one of my my best dream.

✓ I work precisely at the healthcare center in Bojangle and I'm a nurse in the hospital taking care of patients. Being a nurse is one of my best dreams.

The phrase 'walk into a precisely' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'work at' to indicate the place of employment. 'Precisely' is an adverb and should be placed appropriately or omitted if unnecessary.

× Also working there exposed me to many things and making me to help people to be able to make them well again and do things they wanna do and unable to do in the way sick.

✓ Also, working there exposes me to many things and allows me to help people get well again and do things they want to do but are unable to do when sick.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the speaker is currently working there, present tense 'exposes' and 'allows' should be used. 'Making me to help' is incorrect; it should be 'allows me to help'. 'Wanna' is informal and should be 'want to'. The phrase 'in the way sick' is incorrect and should be 'when sick'.

× Also working there exposed me to many things and making me to help people to be able to make them well again and do things they wanna do and unable to do in the way sick.

✓ Also, working there exposes me to many things and allows me to help people get well again and do things they want to do but are unable to do when sick.

The phrase 'making me to help people to be able to make them well again' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'allows me to help people get well again'. The pronouns and verb forms need to be aligned properly for clarity and correctness.

× The employees and patients make the work easy for us because they comply to treatment and seeing them well again makes us happy and encourages us to keep doing a good job.

✓ The employees and patients make the work easy for us because they comply with treatment, and seeing them well again makes us happy and encourages us to keep doing a good job.

The phrase 'comply to treatment' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'comply with'. Also, the sentence structure benefits from adding a comma before 'and' to separate clauses clearly.

× The employees and patients make the work easy for us because they comply to treatment and seeing them well again makes us happy and encourages us to keep doing a good job.

✓ The employees and patients make the work easy for us because they comply with treatment, and seeing them well again makes us happy and encourages us to keep doing a good job.

The verb 'comply' is followed by the preposition 'with', not 'to'. Using the correct preposition is essential for grammatical accuracy.

× What I'm working on in the future is to create a better space for me, a better working condition.

✓ What I'm working on for the future is creating a better space for myself and better working conditions.

The phrase 'working on in the future' is awkward; 'working on for the future' or 'planning for the future' is better. Also, 'a better working condition' should be plural 'conditions' to match common usage. 'Myself' is the correct reflexive pronoun here.

× What I'm working on in the future is to create a better space for me, a better working condition.

✓ What I'm working on for the future is creating a better space for myself and better working conditions.

The phrase 'a better space for me' should use the reflexive pronoun 'myself' because the subject and object refer to the same person.

× I plan to travel out of the country to get gather more experience and come back to my country of origin to improve on their healthcare facilities and to add to what they have increasing knowledge.

✓ I plan to travel abroad to gain more experience and come back to my country of origin to improve their healthcare facilities and add to their existing knowledge.

The phrase 'travel out of the country' is better expressed as 'travel abroad'. 'Get gather' is incorrect; 'gain' or 'gather' alone is correct. 'Improve on their healthcare facilities' should be 'improve their healthcare facilities'. 'Add to what they have increasing knowledge' is awkward; 'add to their existing knowledge' is clearer and grammatically correct.