工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is informative but a bit long and has grammatical errors. Try to make your answer more natural and concise by using correct sentence structures and avoiding redundancy. For example, say "I have been working for three years at Babies International, a company that supplies pharmaceutical raw materials to local pharma companies."

範例: I have been working for three years at Babies International, a company that supplies pharmaceutical raw materials to local pharmaceutical companies.

建議: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using better sentence structure and linking words. For example, say "I work at Babies International, which is located in Mirpur, Dhaka. My working hours are from 9:00 AM to 5:00 PM."

範例: I work at Babies International, which is located in Mirpur, Dhaka. My working hours are from 9:00 AM to 5:00 PM.

建議: Your answer has good points but needs better grammar and linking words to sound natural. Try to say, "Yes, it's a good place to work because the environment is nice and my colleagues are friendly. We have regular working hours, and we often chat and enjoy the office atmosphere."

範例: Yes, it's a good place to work because the environment is nice and my colleagues are friendly. We have regular working hours, and we often chat and enjoy the office atmosphere.

建議: Your answer is good but needs grammatical corrections and clearer linking. For example, say "Yes, I like my workplace because my job is interesting. I source many raw materials worldwide and make friends with partners. Working together helps our friendship grow."

範例: Yes, I like my workplace because my job is interesting. I source many raw materials worldwide and make friends with partners. Working together helps our friendship grow.

建議: Your answer shows good ideas but needs better grammar and structure. Try saying, "My future plan is to learn many things at my office. I want to understand the work and business well, and in the future, I hope to establish a company similar to where I work."

範例: My future plan is to learn many things at my office. I want to understand the work and business well, and in the future, I hope to establish a company similar to where I work.

× I am a working woman and I work in a organization that called Babies International is a raw material supplier company that supplies many many pharmaceutical raw materials to the local pharma company.

✓ I am a working woman and I work in an organization called Babies International, which is a raw material supplier company that supplies many pharmaceutical raw materials to local pharma companies.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before a word starting with a vowel sound 'organization'. It should be 'an organization'. Also, the sentence structure is confusing; adding 'which is' clarifies the meaning. 'Many many' is redundant; 'many' alone is sufficient. 'Pharma company' should be plural to match 'many pharmaceutical raw materials' supplied to multiple companies.

× Last three years I worked in this.

✓ I have worked here for the last three years.

The sentence lacks the present perfect tense which is used to describe an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'Last three years' should be preceded by 'for' to indicate duration. 'In this' is incorrect; 'here' is more appropriate.

× I work in Babies International that is located in Mirpur in Dhaka from 9:00 to 5:00 PM my work time.

✓ I work at Babies International, which is located in Mirpur, Dhaka, from 9:00 AM to 5:00 PM.

The sentence structure is awkward. 'That is located' should be 'which is located' for non-restrictive clause. 'In Mirpur in Dhaka' is better as 'in Mirpur, Dhaka'. 'From 9:00 to 5:00 PM my work time' is incorrect; it should be 'from 9:00 AM to 5:00 PM' to indicate working hours clearly.

× It's environment is very nice.

✓ Its environment is very nice.

'It's' is a contraction for 'it is' or 'it has', but here the possessive pronoun 'its' is needed to show possession of 'environment'.

× We have regular at time and we also do chit chat and we enjoying the office environment, very, very enjoying.

✓ We have regular working hours, and we also chit-chat and enjoy the office environment very much.

'Regular at time' is incorrect; it should be 'regular working hours'. 'Do chit chat' should be 'chit-chat' as a verb. 'We enjoying' is incorrect; it should be 'we enjoy'. 'Very, very enjoying' is ungrammatical; 'very much' is appropriate.

× Yes, I like the place where where I work because my work is very interesting.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because my work is very interesting.

The word 'where' is repeated unnecessarily.

× I sourcing so many raw materials in worldwide and making friends with them.

✓ I source many raw materials worldwide and make friends with them.

'I sourcing' is incorrect; the verb should be 'I source'. 'In worldwide' is incorrect; 'worldwide' does not need a preposition. 'Making friends' should be 'make friends' to maintain parallel structure.

× Actually from working together and as a partner, the friendship is growing.

✓ Actually, by working together as partners, the friendship is growing.

The phrase 'from working together and as a partner' is awkward. 'By working together as partners' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× My future work plan is learn so many things from my office.

✓ My future work plan is to learn many things from my office.

The verb 'learn' needs the infinitive form 'to learn' after 'is'. 'So many things' is better as 'many things' for formal speech.

× Actually I want to learn the work and the business and in future I want to I want to establish a company like that where I work.

✓ Actually, I want to learn the work and the business, and in the future, I want to establish a company like the one where I work.

The sentence has repetition 'I want to I want to'. 'In future' should be 'in the future'. 'A company like that where I work' is unclear; 'a company like the one where I work' is clearer.