工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

範例: I have been working as a laundry aide at a large nursing home in Langley for two years. I really enjoy this job because it allows me to learn many new skills and interact with residents.

建議: Provide a clear and complete answer with proper grammar. Use linking words to explain your duties and the environment. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases.

範例: I work as a laundry aide in a long-term care facility in Langley. My main duties include helping residents sort their clothes and ensuring their laundry is clean and organized.

建議: Improve clarity by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples of why it is a good place to work.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to work because everyone is friendly and cooperative. We work well as a team, which creates many opportunities to learn new things and grow professionally.

建議: Make your answer more natural by improving grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons why you like the place.

範例: Yes, I like the place where I currently work because it is safe and very convenient. It is only a 10-minute commute from my home, and everyone there is very cooperative.

建議: Clarify your future plans with correct grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your current work and education to your future goals.

範例: Currently, I am working as a laundry aide while pursuing education to become a healthcare assistant. In the future, I plan to work in that role, caring for residents and helping with tasks like preparing their meals.

× I work as a laundry aide from a tour from two years in Langley larger nursing home.

✓ I have worked as a laundry aide for two years at Langley Larger Nursing Home.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the present tense 'work' with a time expression indicating a duration in the past ('from two years'). The correct tense to express an action continuing up to now is the present perfect ('have worked'). Also, 'from a tour from two years' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'for two years'. Additionally, 'Langley larger nursing home' should be 'Langley Larger Nursing Home' as a proper noun.

× I work as a laundry aide from a tour from two years in Langley larger nursing home.

✓ I have worked as a laundry aide for two years at Langley Larger Nursing Home.

The preposition 'from' is incorrectly used to indicate duration; the correct preposition is 'for' when expressing a period of time. Also, 'in' is better replaced by 'at' when referring to a specific institution or workplace.

× I really adore to that job because I learn so many new things with this job and.

✓ I really adore that job because I learn so many new things from it.

The phrase 'adore to that job' is incorrect; 'adore' is a verb that does not require 'to'. Also, 'with this job and' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'from it' to indicate learning from the job.

× I'm working in a long term care in Langley as a laundry aide.

✓ I work in long-term care in Langley as a laundry aide.

The present continuous 'I'm working' suggests a temporary action, but since the job is ongoing, the simple present 'I work' is more appropriate. Also, 'a long term care' should be 'long-term care' without the article 'a'.

× It gives me opportunity to give us support to the resident to sort his clothes and my job duties are for.

✓ It gives me the opportunity to support the residents by sorting their clothes, and my job duties include this.

The phrase 'give us support to the resident' is incorrect; 'support the residents' is clearer. Also, 'his clothes' should be 'their clothes' to be inclusive. The sentence is incomplete and needs clarification.

× Everyone is friendly, cooperative and working as a team.

✓ Everyone is friendly, cooperative, and works as a team.

The phrase 'working as a team' is a participle phrase that does not fit well here; it should be 'works as a team' to maintain parallel structure with the other adjectives.

× Working as a team members and I, there are no so many chances to learn new things, to grow up in the world.

✓ As team members, we have many opportunities to learn new things and grow in the world.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Working as a team members and I' is incorrect; it should be 'As team members, we'. Also, 'no so many chances' is incorrect; it should be 'many opportunities'. 'Grow up in the world' is awkward; 'grow in the world' is better.

× Yes, I like that place where I am currently working.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I am currently working.

The phrase 'that place' is less natural here; 'the place' is more appropriate when referring to a specific known location.

× It is safe and convenient place for me because it's near to my home.

✓ It is a safe and convenient place for me because it's near my home.

The preposition 'near to' is incorrect; 'near' is used without 'to' in this context. Also, 'safe and convenient place' needs the article 'a'.

× It take only 10 minutes far away from me and everyone is very cooperative at that place.

✓ It takes only 10 minutes to get there, and everyone is very cooperative at that place.

The verb 'take' should be 'takes' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. Also, '10 minutes far away from me' is awkward; '10 minutes to get there' is clearer.

× Recently I'm working as a laundry aider but as well as now I'm pursuing my education as a healthcare assistant.

✓ Currently, I am working as a laundry aide, and I am also pursuing my education as a healthcare assistant.

The adverb 'Recently' is better replaced with 'Currently' to indicate present ongoing action. 'As well as now' is awkward; 'and I am also' is clearer. 'Aider' should be 'aide'.

× Then I will start my future for in that job to care the residents preparing their meals.

✓ Then I will start my future in that job, caring for the residents and preparing their meals.

The phrase 'start my future for in that job' is incorrect; it should be 'start my future in that job'. Also, 'to care the residents preparing their meals' is ungrammatical; 'caring for the residents and preparing their meals' is correct.