工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は自然ですが、"cutting edge development"の前に冠詞"the"を入れるとより正確です。また、"story about science and technology development"は"stories about science and technology developments"のように複数形にすると自然です。さらに、文をもう少し簡潔にし、冗長さを避けると良いでしょう。

範例: I work as a journalist at a Japanese news agency, mainly covering stories about science and technology developments. It's very exciting because I get to engage with the latest innovations.

建議: "at the central Tokyo"は不自然で、"in central Tokyo"が適切です。また、"on the other hand"は対比を示す表現なので、この文脈では使わない方が良いです。文を分けて、より明確に伝えることを意識しましょう。

範例: I work in central Tokyo, which is about a 30-minute train ride from my home. I often conduct interviews in other parts of Tokyo or the Kanto region, so I frequently leave the office.

建議: "the convenience to reach for your very good restaurants and administration areas"は不自然な表現です。"It's convenient to access good restaurants and administrative areas"のように言い換えましょう。また、"a place for the goods"の意味が不明瞭なので、"the cost of living"など具体的に表現すると良いです。

範例: Yes, I think it's a good place to work because it's in central Tokyo, making it convenient to access good restaurants and administrative offices. However, the cost of living there is quite high, which makes it difficult to live comfortably.

建議: "I prefer the place"は不自然で、"I like the place"や"I prefer working there"が適切です。また、"the price of the goods are"は"the prices of goods are"に修正しましょう。最後の文が未完成なので、完全な文にする必要があります。

範例: Yes, I like the place, but the prices of goods are too high for many people to work there long-term. Instead, I would prefer working in rural areas of Japan because they are safe and convenient.

建議: 文法的に不自然な部分が多いです。"keep this professional"は"continue in this profession"に直しましょう。"On the other hand"は対比に使うので、ここでは使わない方が良いです。"the biggest challenging"は"the biggest challenge"に修正し、文を完結させる必要があります。

範例: I want to continue in this profession as long as possible. However, the biggest challenge is how to deal with the development of artificial intelligence, since AI can now write fluent Japanese, which is a significant concern.

× I mainly cover the story about science and technology development.

✓ I mainly cover stories about science and technology development.

The phrase 'the story' is incorrect here because the student is referring to multiple stories or general coverage, so the plural 'stories' is appropriate. This relates to the use of countable nouns and their number agreement with verbs and articles.

× I can get in touch with the cutting edge development.

✓ I can get in touch with cutting-edge developments.

The phrase 'the cutting edge development' is incorrect because 'cutting-edge' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective, and 'development' should be plural to indicate multiple advancements. Also, 'get in touch with' is correct but the object needs to be plural and properly modified.

× I work at the central Tokyo.

✓ I work in central Tokyo.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect when referring to a general area or city; 'in' is the correct preposition to indicate location within a city or area.

× and on the other hand I always conduct an interview elsewhere in Tokyo or other districts in Kanto City, so I always go out of the office.

✓ and I always conduct interviews elsewhere in Tokyo or other districts in Kanto City, so I always go out of the office.

The phrase 'on the other hand' is used to contrast two ideas, but here it is incorrectly placed and unnecessary. Also, 'an interview' should be plural 'interviews' to match the habitual action. The sentence structure is improved by removing 'on the other hand' and adding 'I' after 'and'.

× the convenience to reach for your very good restaurants and administration areas.

✓ the convenience of reaching very good restaurants and administrative areas.

The phrase 'convenience to reach for your very good restaurants' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'convenience of reaching' without 'for' and 'your' is unnecessary. Also, 'administration areas' should be 'administrative areas' as an adjective.

× But it seems that a place for the goods is very expensive and difficult to live.

✓ But it seems that places for goods are very expensive and difficult to live in.

The phrase 'a place for the goods' is unclear and likely intended to mean 'places for goods' or 'housing'. Also, 'difficult to live' is incomplete; it should be 'difficult to live in'. The verb 'is' should be plural 'are' to agree with 'places'.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The question 'Would you like the place where you work?' is awkward and incorrect in this context. The correct question is 'Do you like the place where you work?' to ask about preference or opinion.

× I prefer the place, but it seems that the price of the goods are too high for many people to work for a long time.

✓ I prefer the place, but it seems that the prices of goods are too high for many people to work for a long time.

The phrase 'the price of the goods are' has a subject-verb agreement error; 'price' is singular but 'are' is plural. Changing 'price' to plural 'prices' matches the plural verb 'are'. Also, 'the goods' is better as 'goods' without 'the'.

× Instead, I like to work in rural areas of Japan because it's very convenient and safe and you can.

✓ Instead, I would like to work in rural areas of Japan because it's very convenient and safe.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and you can.' which is incomplete and unclear. The sentence structure is corrected by removing the incomplete phrase and using 'would like' to express preference.

× I want to keep this professional as long as possible.

✓ I want to keep this profession as long as possible.

The word 'professional' is an adjective or noun referring to a person, but here the student likely means 'profession' (a noun meaning occupation). The sentence structure is corrected by replacing 'professional' with 'profession'.

× On the other hand, and the biggest challenging is how to deal with the development of the artificial intelligence,

✓ On the other hand, the biggest challenge is how to deal with the development of artificial intelligence,

The phrase 'and the biggest challenging' is incorrect. 'Challenging' is an adjective; the noun 'challenge' is needed. Also, 'and' is unnecessary after 'On the other hand,' so it is removed.

× because nowadays AI can write a very frequent Japanese, so it's a very big.

✓ because nowadays AI can write very fluent Japanese, so it's a very big challenge.

The phrase 'a very frequent Japanese' is incorrect; 'frequent' is not appropriate here. The correct adjective is 'fluent' to describe language ability. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'it's a very big.' which is incomplete; adding 'challenge' completes the thought.