工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat clear but lacks completeness and coherence. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'to' and incomplete sentences. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be specific about the online portal name or describe it briefly if you cannot name it.

範例: I am currently working as a Business Development Manager at Techno Solution. My main responsibility is to recruit skilled and unskilled laborers on a full-time basis to support our projects. We usually acquire projects through an online portal, which helps us find new business opportunities.

建議: Your answer is direct but could be improved by adding more details and linking the ideas. For example, explain a bit about Fort Gucci or why it being your hometown is relevant to your work.

範例: My office is located in Fort Gucci, which is also my hometown. This makes it convenient for me to commute and stay connected with my local community.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains repetition and could be more natural. Use linking words like 'because' properly and avoid repeating words. Also, try to expand your answer with more specific reasons.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to work because my home is nearby, which allows me to conveniently balance my work and personal life. Additionally, the office environment is supportive and friendly.

建議: Your answer shows your feelings but is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Avoid repeating phrases like 'I'm getting pressured' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and be specific about the pressure and targets.

範例: Yes, I used to love the place where I work because it had a good environment. However, recently it has become stressful due to high targets that I find difficult to achieve. Because of this pressure, I have decided to leave this office.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Try to form complete sentences and connect your ideas logically. Be specific about your goals and what kind of job you want. Avoid sentence fragments and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: In the future, I want to find a secure job that offers a good salary and valuable experience. This will help me achieve my career goals and grow professionally.

× My job role is to to recruit skilled and unskilled laborers full time basis to support our projects.

✓ My job role is to recruit skilled and unskilled laborers on a full-time basis to support our projects.

The phrase 'to to recruit' contains a repeated 'to' which is incorrect. Also, 'full time basis' should be 'on a full-time basis' to correctly use the preposition and hyphenate the compound adjective. The verb 'to recruit' is correctly used in the infinitive form after 'is'.

× My job role is to to recruit skilled and unskilled laborers full time basis to support our projects.

✓ My job role is to recruit skilled and unskilled laborers on a full-time basis to support our projects.

The phrase 'full time basis' requires the preposition 'on' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'full-time' should be hyphenated as it is a compound adjective modifying 'basis'.

× We take up projects from an online portal called.

✓ We take up projects from an online portal called Techno Solution.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly after 'called'. It needs the name of the portal to complete the thought. Adding 'Techno Solution' completes the sentence logically and grammatically.

× My office is situated at Fort Gucci.

✓ My office is situated in Fort Gucci.

The preposition 'at' is generally used for specific points or addresses, while 'in' is used for areas or localities like 'Fort Gucci'. Hence, 'in Fort Gucci' is correct.

× Yes, it is good place to work because my home is nearby so that I can I can conveniently balance with my work and personal life.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work because my home is nearby so that I can conveniently balance my work and personal life.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'good place'. Also, the phrase 'balance with my work and personal life' is incorrect; it should be 'balance my work and personal life' without 'with'. Additionally, the repeated phrase 'I can' should be corrected to a single instance.

× Yes, it is good place to work because my home is nearby so that I can I can conveniently balance with my work and personal life.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work because my home is nearby so that I can conveniently balance my work and personal life.

The phrase 'I can I can' is a repetition error and should be corrected to a single 'I can'.

× Yes, I love the place I work.

✓ Yes, I love the place where I work.

The sentence is missing the relative pronoun 'where' to correctly link 'the place' and 'I work'. Without 'where', the sentence is incomplete and unclear.

× They had a good environment, but now it's pressurized.

✓ It had a good environment, but now it's pressurized.

The pronoun 'They' is incorrect when referring to 'the place' or 'office'. The correct pronoun is 'It' for singular nouns like 'place' or 'office'. Also, 'had' is past tense which fits the context.

× I'm getting pressured there.

✓ I'm feeling pressured there.

The phrase 'getting pressured' is awkward and not commonly used. The correct expression is 'feeling pressured' to describe experiencing pressure.

× I'm getting lots of targets also that I cannot achieve it.

✓ I'm getting lots of targets that I cannot achieve.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect here because 'targets' is plural and already the object of 'achieve'. Removing 'it' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× That's why I am leaving this office.

✓ That's why I am leaving this office.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× In my future I want to get a secure job.

✓ In the future, I want to get a secure job.

The phrase 'In my future' is less natural than 'In the future'. Also, a comma after 'In the future' improves readability.

× Secure job which gives me.

✓ A secure job which gives me

This is a sentence fragment and incomplete. It should be connected to the previous or next sentence to form a complete thought.

× A good amount of salary and as well as valuable experience whereby I can achieve the goal of.

✓ a good amount of salary as well as valuable experience whereby I can achieve my goals.

The phrase 'and as well as' is redundant; use either 'and' or 'as well as'. Also, 'the goal of' is incomplete and should be 'my goals' to complete the thought. The sentence is a fragment and should be combined with the previous sentence for clarity.