工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is informative but a bit long and slightly unclear at the end. Try to keep your answer concise and complete your sentences clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I am a registered nurse currently working at Shahid Gangalal National Heart Center, a tertiary hospital specializing in heart diseases. I have been working there for six years after starting my career at Norwich International Hospital.

建議: Your answer repeats some information and has minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid repetition and use correct verb forms. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

範例: I work at Shahid Gangalal National Heart Center, a hospital that specializes in heart surgeries. Many patients come from various regions to receive treatment there because of the expertise of the doctors.

建議: Your answer is clear but could be improved by adding more specific reasons and using linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to work because my seniors support me, which helps me improve my skills. Moreover, I learn something new every day, making my job rewarding.

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm but has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use clearer expressions and correct grammar, and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I like my workplace because it is encouraging and allows me to be productive. Additionally, I enjoy learning new skills daily and helping poor patients, which gives me a sense of satisfaction.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid repeating similar phrases.

範例: My future plan is to pursue a master's degree in nursing, followed by a PhD. I also want to engage in research and participate in NGOs and INGOs related to nursing.

× I have been working since six years.

✓ I have been working for six years.

The phrase 'since six years' is incorrect because 'since' is used with a specific point in time, not a duration. The correct preposition for a duration is 'for'. Therefore, it should be 'for six years'. (English explanation: Use 'for' with durations and 'since' with specific points in time.)

× then I shifted onto the.

✓ then I shifted to the.

The preposition 'onto' is incorrect here. The correct preposition to indicate moving to a place or position is 'to'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and should specify the place after 'the'. (English explanation: Use 'to' when indicating movement towards a place.)

× I work in a hospital.

✓ I work at a hospital.

When referring to working at an institution or building, 'at' is more appropriate than 'in'. 'In' is used for being inside a physical space, but 'at' is used for workplaces. (English explanation: Use 'at' for workplaces or institutions.)

× The hospital name is Sahid Gangalal National Heart Center.

✓ The hospital's name is Shahid Gangalal National Heart Center.

The phrase 'The hospital name' is missing the possessive form. It should be 'The hospital's name' to indicate possession. (English explanation: Use possessive form to show ownership.)

× It deals with the heart patients and do heart surgeries as well.

✓ It deals with heart patients and does heart surgeries as well.

'Patients' is plural, which is correct, but the verb 'do' does not agree with the singular subject 'It'. The correct verb is 'does'. Also, 'the heart patients' is better as 'heart patients' without 'the'. (English explanation: Subject-verb agreement requires singular verb with singular subject.)

× Many people come from different places to treat their heart condition condition and the doctors are very specific.

✓ Many people come from different places to treat their heart conditions and the doctors are very specific.

The word 'condition' is repeated and should be plural 'conditions' to match 'many people' and the variety of heart issues. (English explanation: Use plural form when referring to multiple instances.)

× I think yes, it is a good place to work because all the seniors helped me to do the best and I learn every single day.

✓ I think yes, it is a good place to work because all the seniors help me to do my best and I learn every single day.

The verb 'helped' is past tense but the context is present. It should be 'help'. Also, 'to do the best' is incorrect; it should be 'to do my best'. (English explanation: Use present tense for current situations and possessive pronouns for personal references.)

× Yes, I like the place I'm currently working because the place is very encouraging where I can be very productive as well as I enjoy every moment there.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I'm currently working because it is very encouraging, where I can be very productive and enjoy every moment there.

The sentence is a bit awkward. Adding 'where' after 'place' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'as well as I enjoy' is better as 'and enjoy'. (English explanation: Use relative pronouns to clarify and conjunctions to connect ideas smoothly.)

× Every single day I learn new skills and help the poor patient which gives me a sense of sanity on me.

✓ Every single day I learn new skills and help poor patients, which gives me a sense of sanity.

'Patient' should be plural 'patients' to match 'help'. Also, 'sense of sanity on me' is incorrect; it should be 'sense of sanity' or better 'sense of satisfaction'. (English explanation: Match plural nouns with plural verbs and use correct expressions.)

× My future work plan is to get masters degree in nursing and then do PhD in nursing field as well.

✓ My future work plan is to get a master's degree in nursing and then do a PhD in the nursing field as well.

'Masters degree' should be 'master's degree' with possessive form and article 'a'. Also, 'PhD' needs an article 'a'. 'Nursing field' should have 'the' as it is specific. (English explanation: Use articles and possessive forms correctly with academic degrees.)

× I want to do various things in the nursing field like to do research and to get involved in the NGOs and Ingos.

✓ I want to do various things in the nursing field, like doing research and getting involved in NGOs and INGOs.

After 'like', gerunds ('doing', 'getting') are preferred instead of infinitives. Also, 'the' before NGOs and INGOs is unnecessary. (English explanation: Use gerunds after 'like' and omit articles before plural acronyms.)