工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时应更简洁明了，避免冗长和重复。可以先直接回答职业身份，再简要介绍工作内容。

範例: I currently run a small bakery where I sell desserts like cheese and chocolate cakes, as well as beverages such as bubble tea. I really enjoy what I do.

建議: 回答时应避免重复“at the moment”，并且可以用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: I work in a bakery shop, and I feel very satisfied with my job because it gives me a sense of achievement and joy.

建議: 回答中有语法和词汇错误，如“peaks”应为“cakes”，“meet”应为“meat”或其他。建议使用更准确的词汇，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

範例: Yes, I believe it is a good place to work because I learn new skills like baking different cakes every day. Moreover, meeting new people gives me a sense of fulfillment, as I enjoy socializing.

建議: 回答较好，但“pretty much enjoying”不够地道，建议使用更自然的表达。

範例: Yes, I really enjoy working there because all my coworkers are friendly and kind, which makes me feel like part of a family.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，如“I don't like to.”后面缺少内容。建议用完整句子表达观点，并避免语法错误。

範例: That's a difficult question because I haven't thought about it much. I prefer to live in the moment and avoid making detailed future plans, as they can make me feel pressured.

× I sell desserts such as cheeses, chocolate cakes and some beverage including bubble tea, something like that, and I'm pretty much like what I'm doing now.

✓ I sell desserts such as cheese, chocolate cakes and some beverages including bubble tea, something like that, and I'm pretty much like what I'm doing now.

这里的cheeses和beverage数量不匹配。cheese作为不可数名词，不能用复数形式cheeses；beverage应使用复数形式beverages，因为指的是多种饮料。

× At the moment I'm running the small bakery, so I work in a bakery shop.

✓ At the moment I'm running a small bakery, so I work in a bakery shop.

这里的the small bakery使用了定冠词the，暗示特指某个已知的面包店，但前文未提及，应使用不定冠词a small bakery表示泛指。

× I feel very satisfied with my job because it's a job which provides me a sense of achievement and a lot of joy.

✓ I feel very satisfied with my job because it's a job that provides me with a sense of achievement and a lot of joy.

which provides me a sense of achievement缺少介词with，应为provides me with a sense of achievement。

× Yes, I believe so, since every day I can learn some new skills such as baking the new peaks or meet.

✓ Yes, I believe so, since every day I can learn some new skills such as baking new pies or meat.

原句中的peaks应为pies（馅饼），meet应为meat（肉），属于拼写错误，影响表达。

× Meeting new people really provides me a sense of value.

✓ Meeting new people really provides me with a sense of value.

动词provide后应接介词with，表示“提供给某人某物”，缺少with导致表达不完整。

× I'm pretty much enjoying the place where I work because all of my coworkers are very friendly and nice, which makes me feel like a part of family.

✓ I'm pretty much enjoying the place where I work because all of my coworkers are very friendly and nice, which makes me feel like a part of a family.

短语a part of family缺少冠词a，应为a part of a family，表示“家庭的一部分”。

× I don't like to. That's why I don't like to make the future plan, which makes me feel over pressure.

✓ I don't like to. That's why I don't like to make future plans, which makes me feel pressured.

原句结构不完整，over pressure用法错误，应为feel pressured表示感到有压力；future plan应为复数future plans更自然。