工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question first, then adding specific reasons with linking words. Also, correct small grammar mistakes like 'I'm still student' to 'I'm still a student' and 'in abroad' to 'abroad'.

範例: I'm still a student. I recently completed my higher education under the British board, and I plan to pursue my degree abroad because it offers better facilities and opportunities. Moreover, studying abroad will help me learn about different cultures.

建議: Your answer repeats information from the previous question and is slightly redundant. Try to answer directly and avoid repeating the same points. Also, use correct prepositions like 'abroad' without 'in'.

範例: I don't work at the moment as I am still a student. My focus is on pursuing higher education abroad to gain better facilities and learn about different cultures.

建議: Your answer is clear and well-structured but does not directly address whether the place is good to work. Try to answer the question directly first, then add supporting details. Also, avoid repeating your student status multiple times.

範例: I don't work currently, so I can't comment on the workplace. However, the country where I plan to study has excellent job opportunities and a good work environment, which makes it attractive for future employment.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains filler words like 'uh'. Try to answer directly and clearly, avoiding unnecessary hesitation. Also, correct grammar mistakes and be specific about your intentions.

範例: I don't work yet, so I haven't experienced any workplace. But I hope to work in a good environment after completing my studies abroad.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect your ideas and correct grammar mistakes. Also, be more specific about your plans.

範例: In the future, I want to establish my own brand similar to Zudio, which is a famous brand worldwide. Since some cities don't have such brands, I plan to open stores there to fill that gap.

× Well, I'm still student, I recently completed my higher education in British board and I want to pursue my degree in abroad because of other facilities and opportunities and also to learn about different culture.

✓ Well, I'm still a student, I recently completed my higher education in the British board and I want to pursue my degree abroad because of other facilities and opportunities and also to learn about different cultures.

The word 'student' is singular and needs the article 'a' before it (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1). 'British board' requires the definite article 'the' as it refers to a specific board (Grammar Problem Type ID: 17). The phrase 'in abroad' is incorrect; 'abroad' does not need a preposition 'in' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 11). 'Culture' should be plural 'cultures' because it refers to different types of culture (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1).

× Well, I'm still a student, I do not work at the moment, but I want to pursue my degree in abroad because of such facilities and to gain more knowledge about different culture.

✓ Well, I'm still a student, I do not work at the moment, but I want to pursue my degree abroad because of such facilities and to gain more knowledge about different cultures.

The phrase 'in abroad' is incorrect; 'abroad' does not require the preposition 'in' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 11). 'Culture' should be plural 'cultures' because it refers to different types of culture (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1).

× Well, I don't work yet, so I don't have any working experience and any workplace UH. I just want to pursue my uh degree in abroad.

✓ Well, I don't work yet, so I don't have any work experience or workplace. I just want to pursue my degree abroad.

The phrase 'working experience' is incorrect; the correct term is 'work experience' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1). 'Any workplace UH' is unclear and 'workplace' is countable; better to say 'or workplace' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1). The phrase 'in abroad' is incorrect; 'abroad' does not require the preposition 'in' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 11).

× Well in the future I want to establish my own brand like Zudio is the famous brand in the world. So in some cities the brands are not available. I just want to open those brand in those cities.

✓ Well, in the future I want to establish my own brand like Zudio, which is a famous brand in the world. So in some cities, the brand is not available. I just want to open that brand in those cities.

The sentence 'like Zudio is the famous brand' needs a relative clause 'which is a famous brand' for clarity (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26). 'Brands are not available' should be 'brand is not available' because it refers to a specific brand (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1). 'Those brand' should be 'that brand' because 'brand' is singular (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1).