工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は直接的で良いですが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「developing the software for running foreign language」は意味が不明瞭で、「developing software for language learning」など具体的に言い換えると良いでしょう。また、冗長な表現を避け、より自然な英語にすることが必要です。

範例: I work as a software engineer, developing software for language learning and creating trading tools. I find my job very rewarding.

建議: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや繰り返しが多いです。例えば、「I work at home」や「My main job is remote work」など簡潔に表現しましょう。また、接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより自然になります。

範例: I work from home because my job is mainly remote. However, I sometimes meet and interact with people in person, which I enjoy.

建議: 回答は意図が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な接続詞の使い方があります。例えば、「Although it is very expensive but it works」は誤りで、「Although it is expensive, it is worth it」などに直しましょう。より具体的な説明も加えると良いです。

範例: Definitely, my work environment is ideal because it is quiet and I have a large, comfortable screen. Although it was expensive, it helps me work efficiently.

建議: 回答は意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。「commuting company is definitely terrible because of training」は不自然で、恐らく「commuting is terrible because of crowded trains」などが適切です。文法と語彙の改善が必要です。

範例: I definitely like my work environment. When I was a child, I wanted to work from home because commuting in Japan is often difficult due to crowded trains.

建議: 回答は非常に不明瞭で、意味が伝わりません。文法や語彙の基本的な改善が必要です。未来の計画について明確に述べ、簡潔に説明しましょう。

範例: I haven't decided on my future work plans yet. However, I am considering training to improve my skills because I am currently developing a practical trading tool.

× My work is developing the software for running foreign language and also making trading tool.

✓ My work is developing software for running foreign language programs and also making trading tools.

The original sentence lacks plural forms for 'software' and 'trading tool' which should be plural to match the context. Also, 'running foreign language' is incomplete; it should be 'running foreign language programs' for clarity.

× I work in my home, my main job.

✓ I work at my home for my main job.

The preposition 'in' is less appropriate here; 'at' is commonly used to indicate working from a location such as home.

× Although it is very expensive but it works.

✓ Although it is very expensive, it works.

Using both 'although' and 'but' together is redundant. Use either 'although' or 'but' to connect clauses, not both.

× In my childhood, I wanted to work from home because in Japan commuting company is definitely terrible because of training.

✓ In my childhood, I wanted to work from home because commuting in Japan is definitely terrible because of the crowding.

The phrase 'commuting company' is incorrect; it should be 'commuting' or 'commuting crowd'. Also, 'because of training' is unclear; likely intended 'crowding' or 'traffic'.

× I'm not decided yet, but I'm very sorry.

✓ I haven't decided yet, but I'm very sorry.

The phrase 'I'm not decided' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I haven't decided' to express an undecided state in present perfect tense.

× I had a plan to do do do training because I'm now creating trading tool which is very practical.

✓ I had a plan to do training because I'm now creating a trading tool which is very practical.

The repetition 'do do do' is an error and should be corrected to 'do'. Also, 'trading tool' should be singular with an article 'a'.

× So I want to you.

✓ So I want to tell you.

The phrase 'I want to you' is incomplete and incorrect. It should be 'I want to tell you' or 'I want to show you' depending on intended meaning.