工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答不够清晰，语法错误较多，表达不自然。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免无关信息，并注意语法正确。

範例: I am a full-time student. I graduated from the University of International Relations in China.

建議: 回答内容不明确且语法错误严重，无法理解。建议直接回答工作地点，使用正确的词汇和语法。

範例: I work in Beijing, the capital city of China.

建議: 表达不流畅，词汇使用错误，句子结构混乱。建议使用连贯的句子，正确使用词汇，并具体说明原因。

範例: Yes, Beijing is one of the most developed cities in China, so there are many high-paying jobs and good career opportunities.

建議: 回答内容混乱，语法和词汇错误多，表达不清晰。建议简洁表达个人感受，使用正确词汇描述气候和人文环境。

範例: Honestly, I don't like working in Beijing because the climate is not comfortable, and the city is very crowded. Also, I find the people here quite busy and stressed.

建議: 表达有语法错误，句子不够连贯。建议清晰表达未来计划，使用正确语法和词汇，逻辑连贯。

範例: My future plan is to become a lawyer after I complete my postgraduate degree. I believe it is an honor to fight for people's rights and justice, which is why I chose law as my major.

× OK, I'm full time student and I'm your photo and I graduated from Chinese of Foreign Affairs University.

✓ OK, I'm a full-time student and I graduated from the University of International Relations in China.

这里缺少冠词“a”，full-time student是单数名词短语，前面需要冠词。并且原句中“I'm your photo”无意义，应删除。学校名称表达不准确，改为更合适的表达。

× I walking, baking the capital of China.

✓ I am working in Beijing, the capital of China.

原句中“walking”应为“working”，动词形式错误；“baking”应为“Beijing”，拼写错误；缺少介词“in”表示地点。

× Of course of capital picking is the one of the most developed place in our country so you can find high payment, high paid job and Verizon opportunities to make photo.

✓ Of course, Beijing is one of the most developed places in our country, so you can find high-paying, well-paid jobs and various opportunities to make progress.

“picking”应为“Beijing”，拼写错误；“place”应为复数“places”，因为是“one of the most developed places”；“high payment”应为“high-paying”；“high paid job”应为“well-paid jobs”；“Verizon”应为“various”；“make photo”应为“make progress”，词汇错误。

× To be honest, I don't like baking because it's climate is not a modern and and I don't like this motor and I don't like this climate either stand for the second reason. Also, people in here are very came.

✓ To be honest, I don't like Beijing because its climate is not moderate, and I don't like this climate either for the second reason. Also, people here are very calm.

“baking”应为“Beijing”，拼写错误；“it's climate”应为“its climate”，所有格错误；“not a modern”应为“not moderate”，词汇错误；“motor”应为“climate”，重复表达错误；“either stand for the second reason”应为“either for the second reason”，介词使用错误；“came”应为“calm”，拼写错误。

× I my future plan RI plan to be a lawyer after I goat a post graduate Gray and I think that it is a great honor for me to fight for peoples right and justify and this is the reason why I choose the law as my mature major.

✓ My future plan is to be a lawyer after I get a postgraduate degree, and I think that it is a great honor for me to fight for people's rights and justice. This is the reason why I chose law as my major.

“RI plan”应为“I plan”，拼写错误；“goat”应为“get”，拼写错误；“post graduate Gray”应为“postgraduate degree”，拼写错误；“peoples right”应为“people's rights”，所有格和复数错误；“justify”应为“justice”，词汇错误；“choose”时态应为过去式“chose”，因为是过去做出的选择。