工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Yuh fi try keep yuh answer clear an simple, mek sure yuh talk straight to di point. Di sentence dem need fi sound natural an easy fi understand. Avoid mixing up time frames like 'currently' an 'a month ago' inna one sentence.

範例: Right now, I am a student at university, studying for my graduate degree.

建議: Yuh answer is clear an direct, but yuh could add a likkle more detail fi mek it sound more natural an complete.

範例: I don't work at the moment because I am focusing on my studies as a full-time student.

建議: Try fi use clearer sentences an correct grammar. Also, mek sure yuh use relevant vocabulary an explain yuh points well. Avoid confusing phrases like 'professional girls' an 'my color was often shared knowledge'. Use linking words fi mek di answer flow better.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to work because the environment is friendly and supportive, which helps employees stay motivated. Moreover, the company offers flexible working hours and opportunities for professional growth. For example, colleagues often share knowledge and collaborate effectively, creating a positive atmosphere.

建議: Yuh fi use correct words an grammar fi mek yuh answer clear. Also, try fi link yuh ideas properly. For example, 'comfortable, reliable, and well-equipped workplace' instead of 'comfort, rible and will equipment'.

範例: Yes, I would definitely like to work in a comfortable, reliable, and well-equipped workplace because it can boost my productivity and motivation. For example, having natural light and a quiet environment helps me focus better on my tasks.

建議: Try fi speak clearly an use correct grammar. Also, explain yuh plans in a simple an logical way. Avoid confusing phrases like 'iPod to pursue' an 'to answers my skills'.

範例: In the future, I plan to pursue a career in digital marketing because it combines creativity with data analysis, which I find very appealing. I want to gain more experience through internships and online courses to improve my skills.

× In the present time, I'm currently studying a month ago, I'm Graduate School and I'm up to study in university.

✓ Currently, I am studying at graduate school and planning to study at university.

The sentence incorrectly mixes present and past time expressions ('currently' and 'a month ago') and uses incorrect verb forms. The phrase 'I'm up to study in university' is unclear and ungrammatical. The correction uses present continuous tense appropriately and clarifies the intended meaning.

× In the present time, I'm currently studying a month ago, I'm Graduate School and I'm up to study in university.

✓ Currently, I am studying at graduate school and planning to study at university.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper structure, mixing time references and ideas. The correction restructures the sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I don't work, I'm a student.

✓ I don't work; I am a student.

The original sentence is a run-on with two independent clauses joined by a comma. Using a semicolon or separating into two sentences improves clarity and correctness.

× Additionally, the company offers flexible working hours and opportunities for professional girls make me the attractive workplace.

✓ Additionally, the company offers flexible working hours and opportunities for professional growth, which make it an attractive workplace for me.

The phrase 'opportunities for professional girls' is incorrect and unclear. It likely intended 'opportunities for professional growth'. Also, 'make me the attractive workplace' is ungrammatical; it should be 'make it an attractive workplace for me'.

× For example, my color was often shared knowledge and their collaborate effectually, which creates positive atmosphere.

✓ For example, my colleagues often share knowledge and collaborate effectively, which creates a positive atmosphere.

'My color' is a mishearing or typo for 'my colleagues'. 'Their collaborate effectually' is incorrect; it should be 'collaborate effectively'. Also, 'creates positive atmosphere' needs the article 'a' before 'positive atmosphere'.

× Yes, I will definitely like the place where I worked.

✓ Yes, I will definitely like the place where I work.

The sentence mixes future tense 'will like' with past tense 'worked'. Since the speaker is talking about a future preference, the correct phrase is 'where I work'.

× A comfort, rible and will equipment workplace can significantly boost my product with the end of motivation.

✓ A comfortable, reliable, and well-equipped workplace can significantly boost my productivity and motivation.

The original sentence contains misspelled and incorrect words: 'comfort' should be 'comfortable', 'rible' likely 'reliable', 'will equipment' should be 'well-equipped', and 'product with the end of motivation' is unclear and corrected to 'productivity and motivation'.

× For example, having natural light and a high and a quiet environment helps me focus better on my tasks.

✓ For example, having natural light and a quiet environment helps me focus better on my tasks.

The phrase 'a high and a quiet environment' is unclear; 'high' is unnecessary or incorrect here. Removing 'high and a' clarifies the sentence.

× In the future, iPod to pursue a career in digital marketing becauses it companies creativity with that analysis, which I find very appealing.

✓ In the future, I plan to pursue a career in digital marketing because it combines creativity with data analysis, which I find very appealing.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'iPod' should be 'I plan', 'becauses' should be 'because', 'it companies creativity with that analysis' is incorrect and corrected to 'it combines creativity with data analysis'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× I'm to gain more experience for internship an online course to answers my skills.

✓ I am going to gain more experience through an internship and an online course to improve my skills.

The phrase 'I'm to gain' is incorrect; 'I am going to gain' is appropriate. 'For internship an online course' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'through an internship and an online course'. 'To answers my skills' is incorrect; corrected to 'to improve my skills'.