工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and direct, which is good. To improve, you could add a bit more detail about your role or what you enjoy about your job to make your response more engaging and informative.

範例: I'm currently working as a nurse in a public hospital in Hong Kong, where I specialize in patient care in the general medicine department.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some grammatical errors and irrelevant information. Try to give a clear, concise answer directly related to the question, avoid repetition, and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct.

範例: I work in the general medicine department of a busy public hospital in Hong Kong, where the environment is fast-paced and demanding.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but could be improved by combining sentences for better flow and adding linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I don't think it's a good place to work because it is a very fast-paced environment, and since you have to take care of at least 12 patients during your shift, it can be quite overwhelming.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains some unclear words and grammatical errors. Try to use precise vocabulary and correct grammar, and connect your ideas with linking words for clarity.

範例: I don't particularly like the place where I work because the environment is quite stressful. Since I have to take care of many patients, it can be very demanding and overwhelming, which makes it hard for me to relax during the day.

建議: Your answer shows good ideas but has grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences. To improve, use correct verb tenses, complete your thoughts, and connect your ideas with linking words for coherence.

範例: I have always dreamed of moving abroad to work with people from diverse cultures because I believe it will broaden my horizons and help me develop new skills. Working in an international environment will also allow me to learn different perspectives and improve my abilities. Ultimately, I hope this experience will enhance my career.

× I As I mentioned, I work in a public hospital in Hong Kong. Especially the general medicine department.

✓ As I mentioned, I work in a public hospital in Hong Kong, especially in the general medicine department.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper connection between clauses. Combining the sentences with a comma and adding 'in' before 'the general medicine department' improves sentence flow and clarity.

× I work in award, which is very busy and very compact.

✓ I work in a ward, which is very busy and very compact.

The word 'award' is incorrect here; the correct term is 'ward' which refers to a hospital section. Also, the article 'a' is needed before 'ward'.

× I'll save the environment.

✓ [Sentence removed as it is irrelevant and incorrect in context.]

This sentence is out of context and does not relate to the previous statements. It should be omitted for coherence.

× I don't think it's a good place to work because it is a very fast-paced environment and you have to take care of at least 12 patients. In your shift, which is very overwhelming.

✓ I don't think it's a good place to work because it is a very fast-paced environment and you have to take care of at least 12 patients in your shift, which is very overwhelming.

The sentence is fragmented; 'In your shift' is a sentence fragment. Combining it with the previous sentence using a comma improves sentence structure.

× I don't particularly like the place where I work because the Mermans is quite stressful.

✓ I don't particularly like the place where I work because the environment is quite stressful.

The word 'Mermans' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo. The correct word is 'environment'. Using the correct noun clarifies the meaning.

× I have to take care of many patients which can be very demanding and sometimes very overwhelming and this make me hard for me to relax during the day.

✓ I have to take care of many patients, which can be very demanding and sometimes overwhelming, and this makes it hard for me to relax during the day.

The sentence is run-on and has subject-verb agreement errors ('make' should be 'makes'). Adding commas and correcting the verb form improves clarity and grammar.

× I have always dreamed of moving abroad T work with people from diverse cultures because I believe it will broaden my horizens and help me develop new skills.

✓ I have always dreamed of moving abroad to work with people from diverse cultures because I believe it will broaden my horizons and help me develop new skills.

The phrase 'T work' is a typo and should be 'to work'. Also, 'horizens' is misspelled; the correct spelling is 'horizons'.

× Working in international environment will also allowed me to learn different perspectives and improve my ability.

✓ Working in an international environment will also allow me to learn different perspectives and improve my ability.

The phrase 'international environment' needs the indefinite article 'an' before it. Also, 'allowed' should be 'allow' to match future tense.

× Ultimately, I hope this experience.

✓ Ultimately, I hope to gain valuable experience.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb phrase. Adding 'to gain valuable' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct.